wow...i really love what you have done with these versions...you describe and explain Quinn's emotions more, lengthing out the scenes, have more dialogue while balancing it all out with what Quinn is thinking...just pure awesomeness!

wow...this new draft is pure amazingness...you have added more description, more emotion, just turned the level up a whole notch. awesome.

ooh...I like this draft much better, good job! Lots more description, you lenegthened some scenes out, we get to see more of what Quinn's thinking...very well done. And at the same time, you've kept it the same story, with some of the same dailogue...I'm loving this!