Hey Lauren! I love how the story is progressing It gives me a sense of the chills, as I wonder what's going to happen next. I was pretty surprised when the grandmother was okay with the murder. But eh, she hated him; I guess that's an okay excuse o.o LOL

Anyways, there were a few punctuation mistakes, such as the apostrophe marks. Be careful when to put them, okay? Everything was pretty much great. Though I'm not sure, since I'm not a professional editor. XD

Well,keep updating okay?

Awesome first chapter. I can't wait to read the next one.

I like the plot, its very quick and too the point, and interesting as well. I just think its lacking a bit of detail :/ If you'd add more imagery and elaborate more on the character's thoughts and feelings, I think that would improve your writing :) Pleae keep writing. I look forward to the next chapter.