|Reviews for Inaversibilis Periculo|
| TypicalAznPerson101 8/17/11 . chapter 2
Hey Lauren! I love how the story is progressing It gives me a sense of the chills, as I wonder what's going to happen next. I was pretty surprised when the grandmother was okay with the murder. But eh, she hated him; I guess that's an okay excuse o.o LOL
Anyways, there were a few punctuation mistakes, such as the apostrophe marks. Be careful when to put them, okay? Everything was pretty much great. Though I'm not sure, since I'm not a professional editor. XD
Well,keep updating okay?
| SoullessLove 8/16/11 . chapter 1
Awesome first chapter. I can't wait to read the next one.
| Such Sweet Sorrows 8/15/11 . chapter 1
I like the plot, its very quick and too the point, and interesting as well. I just think its lacking a bit of detail :/ If you'd add more imagery and elaborate more on the character's thoughts and feelings, I think that would improve your writing :) Pleae keep writing. I look forward to the next chapter.