Reminds me of a assassin movie, interesting and have nice potential.

Looking forward to the second chapter.

Review can be returned on "Creepypasta".

The first thing I'll say is be careful of your sentences being too repetativie; a lot in the first half start with a name, and they feel repetative, kind of like "Burwell did this. Tucker did that. burwell did this then Tucker did..." etc. Maybe just change the structure around a bit. i think the start seems interesting, and the gossiping about Burwell's arrival gives a strong sense of the kind of community he has moved into, so good job on subtly describing the street. I look forward to see more of this.

Interesting, it was a little hard to get into at first. But Im nevr been a huge stephen king fan. I'd be interested to see where the story goes and if i can get into it.

C.C

So, the hyped story has finally arrived. Starting off: Things I liked. I loved the description of Dalton's anger at the moving team. The only thing I didn't really like was how short this chapter seems, but mine are about this length so that's minor. All in all, good job. Please return on Shadow Rain, thanks :)

-SA, Club Blitz.