Oh, Ducky. This is gorgeous. It really identifies both with you and with the reader. I can feel exactly what you're trying to express... Being all you can be, doing all you can do, even if it means leaving behind things that were once so important to you. I sympathize entirely with this piece, especially recently. I love it, and you're right to be proud of it.

Mm. _ This is lovely. Flows very well, good balanced mix of 'I can do this' and heartache throughout, didn't notice any awkward lines. Well-done, I say.