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Erysimum 10/31/11 . chapter 1There is so much palpable emotion in this poem. Regret and uncertainty, and I loved the line 'the texture of silence': it sums up perfectly the way unspoken words we know we ought to say become physical, more solid, the longer you leave them. If that makes any sense. And the last two lines made it for me. |
becquerel 9/17/11 . chapter 1i really like this, the idea, the concept. it really speaks to the audience. i especially enjoyed the title and last two lines. all in all, great work. do keep it up. |
kloun mannequin 9/5/11 . chapter 1everybody gets afraid of that :) cool poem. |
short circuit 9/5/11 . chapter 1I love the punniness of this and the repetition of the last two lines with subtle changes of meaning from punctuation. Love the shiraz. :) Just found your poetry and it's brilliant. |
Sepulchred 9/4/11 . chapter 1There are so many things I love about this. I love how you've squeezed so much meaning into so few words, and I love the meshing of fore- and wordplay. I love how you've associated pride with cannibalism, because I've never thought about it that way, but it makes SO much sense. I love the lines' 'my world is the taste of shiraz and the texture of silence' - they're so beautiful and I want to steal them from you. I love the repetition at the end and the way the addition of the two commas made the two sentences so different. I love this, love this, love this, and I don't think I've ever been so enthusiastic about anything before. |
cecyouyed 8/31/11 . chapter 1YES. You never let me down. Keep it up, love your style. |
Guest 8/31/11 . chapter 1 This is good. It's minimal but tells a story quite well. |
smoke another grin 8/31/11 . chapter 1lovely. |