There are lots of different characters in this story so sometimes it's hard to remember who is who but I do love the story! Drayden seems really creepy and I'm guessing he will show up a lot just because of the character he seemes to be. Overall it was a great chapter, update soon!

Wow... if some guy who'd been drinking pulled a knife on me I'd probably have wet myself on the spot... Joke or not that was creepy...

Great chapter. I love this story so much. I can't wait for more. You are doing an excellent job with all of these characters. I can't wait to see what happens next.

Great job,

Kelly

I love your story so far. Annika seems like a pretty cool girl and I really want to hear more about Noah and Mia. Please update soon!

This chapter is too short! DX

But I did like the introductions of Noah and Mia. :D Looks like Anni is developing a bit of a crush on Noah, and I recognize one of Mia and Kofi's exchanges from the RP but it was still cute. x3

And Annika will kick Kofi's ass next time. 8D

Cool, love it. This story is great.

I can't wait for the next chapter. Update soon.

Kelly

Not-So-Anonymous Review time! First off, my only complaints is that it was too short and you could have fleshed out Kofi and Annika's conversation a bit. That's literally it. Everything else was great. You set up a good base to begin the story by introducing Kofi and Annika and setting up the transition from Annika's room to the neighborhood. Wording, grammar, etc was all perfect and I didn't know Kofi had dreads o.O

Either way, I expect greatness from you, Lolli :D

I love it! From the first sentence I was drawn in and it just got better from there. You are truly a genius. If this was an actual book, I'd totally wait in line for hours to have you sign it. That is after I waited in line for hours to buy a copy.

I like Annika and Kofi they seem to have some great chemistry right off the bat and not just on the video game front. I don't know that much about Mia yet so I can't tell you weather I like her or not but I know that I like this story.

You have me hooked Lolli. No question about it. And what's even better about this is that since I haven't submitted an OC I can be completely objective on the whole thing and I love it! I think you have a future in the business of being an author you fun sized genius you.

Can't wait to read more,

Update soon,

Kelly

Yay! It's up! Good job, Lollikins!

I'll be expecting an update

Kina

REALLY GOOD! Keep going! I can't wait for the next chapter! :) Annika sounds like a cool girl! I hope u update faaassst. i'll keep you in my favorites and alert. please update sooon! :D ooo, and read my story! I'll appreciate that too! :)