I screamed when I saw you updated. :)
Oh Val, getting a taste of action. this was so wonderfully portrayed. Love how creepy the demons are...they gave me the chills.
This story never fails to amaze me and I can't wait to see what you come up with next!

I am so completely in love with these characters. You've given them all such wonderful depth...I can't wait to see where you take this story. Their friendship is really developing and growing and im sure it will grow better and more in the future :D

hey, it's meg in case you're wondering : )
WOW. you've really done amazing things since I read the rough half of this chapter! wow! Beautiful! I love the ending-very dramatic-and the movie references were great :) Keep up the awesome work!

Awesome chapter. Some of the first part was a little jumpy-just try and lengthening the sentences more and be a tiny bit more descriptive. By the end though you had everything flowing well and going smoothly. Love this. Can't wait for more!

Gotta love Val here :D Great chapter for both Val and Ben! awesome stuff!

aaaw love the sherlock piece at the end! great way to wrap up the chapter on a little bit of a lighter note. awesome job :)

WOW.
what a great chapter! I love how Ben and Val interact, and the realization about Ambriel...amazing, amazing, amazing.

oh god, that was AMAZING. excuse me while I go curl up and sob happy tears. Ben and Val's meeting was so utterly and completely perfect...wow, wow, wow.
amazing.

what a chapter for Ben! Amazing, especially the end, with Moira, I really like her character. You're writing has improved SO MUCH...and nothing shows it better than these two chapters. wow, wow, wow. you should be really proud of yourself, because this right here, is like publishable. I love this. I love how you connect these two characters so perfectly, yet keep them apart...amazing.
can't wait for more!

intense. AMAZING. wow.
this chapter was PERFECT. Val was amazing here-he developed so much, and his innocent responses, his pain, and his desperate desire to help Ben made me fall in love with his character even more. wow. You've really outdone yourself with this one mellon nin. Amazing.

I LOVED this! this chapter of insight into Ben's head was AWESOME. I think it really developed his character...great stuff. can't wait for more!

WOW. intense chapter, especially the ending. I love how everything is starting to build up now, and I can feel that we are pretty close to the start of something epic. I adore Val, and Ben, and their characters are really starting to develop. Awesome.

wow.

that was INTENSE.

loved every second of it. Your writing is improving with each chapter, and the story just keeps getting better and better!

AMAZING.

i love the changes you've made...it's clear and mysterious at the same time. the ending makes me want to cry and scream at the same time :) awesome cliffhanger.

can't wait to see what you come up with next!

amazing chapter, mellon nin! the emotions, the tenseness, the grief...I wish i could write a better, more constructive review, but i am in awe right now. I'll reread the chapter and write a better one later, but right now, my only thought is: WOW.

your writing has improved so much since the start of the story, and this chapter shows it with the vivid word pictures, and the description you use to explain to the reader what is going on. amazing.