|Reviews for Space and Time|
| J112011 12/8/11 . chapter 7
I take it "the exhausted mom" is the momma cat, right? And she's sleeping on the table because the kittens can't reach her there? Funny! Is there a longer story behind this poem?
| J112011 12/8/11 . chapter 6
it could be understood just as you wrote it - that it's nice to open windows after the storm has stopped, but of course "storm" could also have a different, deeper meaning
| J112011 12/3/11 . chapter 5
hm... not sure I get this one
| J112011 12/3/11 . chapter 4
this one is great! so few words, but yet you convey the whole scene of what misty morning does to one's hair
| J112011 12/3/11 . chapter 3
very nice and sweet (I love the sea)
but shouldn't the middle line be 7 syllables (just asking, not criticizing)
| J112011 12/3/11 . chapter 2
just noticed that you have a couple of dozens of haikus here...
this one... I think it's the pain of ... something... could be love that ended, but just as easily could be something else
| J112011 12/1/11 . chapter 1
Since I'm not a very astute poetry reader, I had to read this poem a couple of times to understand its meaning. I'm still not sure I understand the way you intended it, but just wondering whether the narrator is getting upset at the sight of Valentine's roses either sold at the street stand or being given to someone else, and that's why she would prefer to be nowhere, just not to see that.
| empty seas 10/11/11 . chapter 21
and this! oh, i think this is my favourite yet. for so little words it speaks so loud. i love the lack of punctuation, it makes it feel quite rushed, but in a good way if you get what i mean. and the last line, "it is near midnight" - lovely.
| empty seas 10/11/11 . chapter 22
this - the simplicity, the gorgeous language, the image it brings to mind - is just stunning.
| The Moon Howls At The Wolf 10/1/11 . chapter 21
Hi Dark Blue Lover. I felt like returning the favor, because you are always so nice by reviwing everything I write. Hope all is well, and your test goes well!
This haiku is intense, and it took me a few readings to fully understand what you meant, but I believe I get the emotion behind it. (Correct me if I'm wrong, but I think its about tears that won't be shed being wiped away at midnight) Anyway based of this interpretation I get the feeling that the girl, yes I assume girl based on the fact that her nails are painted, is broken but cannot begin to heal because she cant cry
this is good, keep writing
| AppleCrumble 9/19/11 . chapter 10
This ones really nice, its meanings deep and really good. i like the line hours wither away. :-D
| AppleCrumble 9/18/11 . chapter 1
I love how much you say in three lines! Its really good!
| saraji06 9/16/11 . chapter 1
It's good; about love, am I right?
Just wondering, after "Valentine's roses", are you beginning a new sentence or continuing on? Something I would do if I were continuing on would be to put a semi-colon after roses, because to me it sounds like another thought. It sounds as though the roses would rather be nowhere, instead of the one who's receiving them, if you know what I mean. Other than that, excellent work. :)
| Supergirl413 9/15/11 . chapter 24
Hey, thanks for the reviews. I really appreciate feedback :)
I very much enjoyed reading this collection! My favorites were Fear, Ache, Death, and Sleep. "Fear" was reminiscent of that burning urge as a child to turn the nightlight on. Make sure there's nothing lurking in the shadows (except house cats ;)).
"Ache"...well, I can relate to that one; having a feeling you can't fight back, but not knowing where it's coming from.
"And the child...that was to live tomorrow...will be free." Wonderful 3
May I quote you in future poems? Of course, I will give you all credit. (footnotes, citations, whatever).
All together, amazing job on these! Keep up the great work :)
| empty seas 9/15/11 . chapter 10
So, so beautiful. I can't even express in words how amazing your haiku are.