|Reviews for The Daughter|
| my poor toaster 11/13/11 . chapter 1
My sisters name was Holly.
| Devlin Saints 10/18/11 . chapter 1
Alright, Im sure if you had some spare time you would fix all your mistakes, So... I'll just talk about the story.
I didnt get that they were alone when she started strangling the daughter. I thought they were still at the funeral.
I love the way your story started, and I dont say this much with Short stories but... I kinda wish it was longer. I think more examples of why the BRAT is 'the BRAT' would better serve your story in the end. The ending is morbid and quick., I dont know wether someone would say thats a good thing or bad, but I liked it, and the irony hit me pretty hard, and I liked that, too.
| Miryo 9/19/11 . chapter 1
It's fun to see a story from the "wicked step-mother"'s point of view once in a while.
I did spot a few errors, though.
- I could be called the eptiome of the evil stepmother, do to the fact I hate my stepdaughter.
"Do" should be "due".
- "I want you gone!" she screams.
"Screams" should be "screamed", since everything else is told in past-tense.
- I had tried this before and it never succeded.
"Succeded" should be "succeeded".
Very creepy ending. Looks like wicked step-mothers can NEVER catch a break. Great story.