| Reviews for The Source |
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Cherry Blossom Geisha 9/30/11 . chapter 1hehehe.. I don't find it depressing at all! XD I likes it! :3 |
Dark Blue Lover 9/23/11 . chapter 1I kinda like this one Dark, but it conveys feeling. Especially nice how you use such contrasting words "source" and "empty", "wilted" and "dripping"... and then the end as a conclusion. I don't think you need to stress these words specially - I think I caught onto it in the unedited version already, but if it's for rhythm... I've never been good with that I got kinda confused over the word "arrival" (like: arrival of what? rain? water?)... and the "it is never coming"... but probably I'm just taking those lines too literally-.- Kinda gave me the impression of "emotional emptiness in contrast to plenty in nature/excess on the outside"... which I'm encountering a lot. So anyway, great work! Keep writing :) Dark Blue Lover |