This makes me think, not for the first time, that there should be warning signs along the line between intense love and mad, raving passion. But who would want to obey them?

Good job of reminding us that romance beats clever every time.

"i think you're beautiful, in every sense of that word

like an ice sculpture of a treble clef, melting while the guitars sing."

Can I just say wow?

Seriously, such a powerful opening line, and beautiful imagery.

I like what you're saying with this - on how someone can have more control in a friendship or relationship than you do, and it is really quite painful. Lovely work :)