This story is very interesting. I like how it shows the main characters personality right away. Just one thing I don't know the main characters name. If you mention it even just once I probably would remember it because he has so much overal I really like this story. update soon 8)

Um, you are using the instead of the ' needed for words such as it's. I don't know why, but this story is kind of intriguing in a weird way even though at this point it makes no sense.

-Dhani