Aw... this is really interesting and sweet! Update soon! Hey, this isn't a flame, and I wouldn't even bother correcting you if I thought your story didn't have any potential. So... when you have dialogue, you use quotation marks instead of aposthophe. So like 'With you? Um yes! Of course Jake!' I practically sang should be like "With you? Um yes! Of course, Jake!" :) That's the only main grammar error. Otherwise, I LOVE IT! A LOT!

Spirit keepers? I'm doind a trilogy like that. Only it's like PromiseKeepers, GateKeepers, SecretKeepers. :D

- Ray.

cautee! can't wait to see Jake & Ivy's relationship progress more! :D

This was awesome, but you accidentally wrote 'Just running an errand babe,' he slurred, raising one sloppily raising one lopsided eye in a malicious manner. '

otherwise it was awesome darl xoxox

The first ghost Ivy met was named Kasper. It looked kid of like a chinese dragon with red eyes. At first it wanted to kill Ivy because it thought she was an enemy.

The first ghost Ivy has fought... I forget what it's called, but it had green eyes and was venemous.

This SO reminds me of my story, Panerva's School for the Gifted, where my main character, Nikita, crashes into Joseph Vendetta, school hottie, and they instantly fall for eachother. Ah, memories...

Speaking of which, maybe you could read that story for me, Panerva's School for the Gifted, please?

That was awesome! :D LOL. I've made up Ivy's face in my mind. A white haired beauty. :D Well, keep making them sir! :)

This chapter is awesome! xD I laughed to hard when Jake bit Hale's tongue. lol. anyways... keep publishing more chapters. :)

Cool. xD But I have one question. What is the name of the main protagonist? :D

Cool dude. :) A HUGE THUMBS UP. I've only red the first chapter. I'll continue to read the others. and I'll totally subscribe to you! :D

So good! :D

update soon Allykins ... can't wait to see what happens!

I hate Hale! she's such a ***** :P lol but anyway update asap! :D

love chuu xoxoxo

Okay, so I like the whole concept of this story and everything. But there are several ways in which you can improve you writing, no offence intended of course, I'm just gonna try and help you improve your writing :)

First, there are many grammatical errors. One example is that you keep using 'cos' for because. You shouldn't use abbreviations like that while writing a story, it makes the story seem less serious.

Also, when writing a story numbers should usually be spelled out.

Anddd, you should be more descriptive. I feel like you just skim past all the description and hurry through the story.

So yeah :) I hope my advice will be taken and I hope that you have taken no offense from the advice.

Keep writing though! Just focus on the stuff I told you about.

Ooh, please update :D

I noticed several spelling and grammar errors, but otherwise this is AWESOME :) :)

Awesomesause! she seems to have a tendency to ramble off, just like me!

please...update...soooooooooon! ive gotta see how the lunch/first date goes!

WOW!

this was so amazing :)

I love the plot :D

please update soon!

ok guys fro chapter three the end is supposed to be,

Ivy. Ivy. Mysterious name, mysterious girl.

my comp would not let me change it so just read it as the above. Thanks!