| Reviews for Obsession |
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Mrstress 10/2/11 . chapter 1I think this has the potential to be a really strong piece, but the passion that one normally gives their so-called obsession doesn't come through with your choice of words. I like the onomatopoeia, and the repetition as though the poem is being written whilst the author is knitting, but I think that there's a little room for improvement on the lines in-between. Keep writing! |
ForThoseNotBreathing 10/2/11 . chapter 1Hmm. This was interesting, simple, but there seems to be a lot simmering under the surface, which brings out my curiosity. |