|Reviews for False Judgements|
| N.H 10/23/11 . chapter 5
I have to admit, as I read this final chapter, I was like "Whaaaaa...?"(With a very shocked face:P) It really surprised me! I reread it again, just to make sure I got the facts straight. I mean...who knew?(Besides you, Creek.)Though I have to admit, I'm confused a little. If Marie was really the culprit all this time, then why did she try to act like she was trying to figure out who did it in the first chapter? What did she exactly figure out about Evalyn? Who actually is Marie? Why did she escape in the end? It seemed that to me that she didn't escape so she wouldn't be caught, but to do more harm to the others. Why exactly did she murder people at her school? What was it about them that made her feel threatened or something? I'm very confused or either I'm very stupid or something, because I really can't figure it out. Maybe you can explain it to me later? (Hopefully, I will understand.)But I'm not criticizing you. I think I just don't get it. Maybe it was supposed to be a left a mystery...but then again
Self Conscious got it...so, please, help me understand!:)
| N.H 10/23/11 . chapter 3
Hi,Creek! Thanks for making me your editor! Now I shall revise chapter 3 of False Judgements, though you didn't give me a lot to revise!(That's a compliment:D)Only just a small typo "thevictims" which should be "the victims". And I guess I would suggest instead of saying "She holds no grudge" I would say "She never holds a grudge" or "She doesn't hold grudges". Of course, you decide. Besides that,it's great so far! Great job, Creek!
| N.H 10/19/11 . chapter 2
Hello again,Creek! I'm sorry, but I can't wait to start editing, so, if you don't mind, I just want to start a little now.I suggest instead of "a dreamy, sleepful summer" I would change it to a dreamy, sleepy summer. Maybe that doesn't sound better,it's up to you. But it seemed like a mistake to me to use the word "sleepful". (It even has a red, underline on it.) Also, instead of "She absolutely hated Mondays" I would add an "and" to the beginning since you were listing off the things she hated (if that makes sense). At the end, all you said was "She knew...". I know that was a little of a cliffhanger into the other chapter, but just explain a little why she suspected Evalyn so much out of that odd look. I guess I mean explain a little of the look Evalyn made. A murderous look? A angry look? You take this advice or not, it's up to you. That's all the editing I'm doing for today. Bye, Creek!:)(Keep making awesome stories!)
| N.H 10/19/11 . chapter 1
Hello, Creek! You know me,(N.H.) I'm your friend from school! When you told me about this website, I was sooooooo eager to read your stories that I was practically twitiching!:P Anyway,if it's okay with you, then I want to be your editor!(Please?) So,I was reading this, and it's great! I never really reviewed your writing before, and it is amazing how you write! You definitely know how to start a story, because you already got me at the edge of my seat! Everything looks fine so far(except for the small typo Self-Concious pointed out). I'm definitely going to read more, and hopefully give you some pointers and advice if you let me be your editor. So, talk to you later! -N.H.
| Self conscious 10/16/11 . chapter 5
:D I loved the ending. It made me really happy. I wish it could have been longer, but hey, I'm not the author :)
It seemed like towards the end of the story your paragraphs and chapters got shorter. Maybe there wasn't that much to describe, but I liked it. You should write more stories like this.
Great Work! :D
| Self conscious 10/16/11 . chapter 2
Gah! I love it. It's so mysterious :D
| Self conscious 10/16/11 . chapter 1
Nice story. I can't wait to read more. Everything was perfect. Although I did see a little mistake. You spelled "They" like "Thaey". It's a easy fix, and other than that, it was perfect. I like the way you write. It seems like something that I would buy from the bookstore and reread over and over again.