I don't exactly know how, but this was incredible, in some way. The words felt amazing, the stream of the words, even if at times it was a bit awkward, I enjoyed that awkwardness.

I wish he'd hold my hAnd, ...
"I wish I'd nicked something Else." ...
I wish he knew how I fElt, ...

These lines sounded RIGHT. Perfect.
Talent.

Wow, just wow. This is so good, the varying lengths of each line makes the flow smooth and really nice to read. It's really beautiful; I love how you mix thoughts with what really happening. This is amazing, well done :D x

I always admired people who can write poems because I can't. I enjoy this poem. Loose and flowing and just brimming with emotion. Your story-telling through a poem reminds me of Robert Frost - my all time favourite.

Picturesque. There is no other word able to describe this poem. Just... I can't even place it into words.

Gabriel