|Reviews for Eye of the Storm|
| ShadowJunkie 10/30/12 . chapter 17
I love you. I want to tell you how much I love you. I want to tell you how much I love your story. I want to tell you about all the whirls of excitement you made me feel and how I wanted to jump off a goddamn cliff because of how stupidly dense Cam and Brian are and I want to tell you how much of a bastard I felt for actually screaming out "hell yeah!" when Leander and Cam broke up and also the fact that I felt sad when reading how depressed Brian got because I've been there. Not personally, but I've got friends who looked miserable and depressed because they love their best friends and they know they can't have them because one is straight and the other likes a different guy, and because I know guys can actually cry if it all piles up to much and I hate it when that happens. And I also want to tell you how much I'd love to read more about Graham because I liked how he pissed he was when Brian called him and I like how much he sounds interesting
And I guess I already am telling you about how much I love you, but I really want to tell you more because I know I feel more but I don't think I have time because of the heat I'm feeling in the middle of f cking October (why the hell is it hot in October! Where's the rain the weather channel promised?!) and I'm still too high strung on your story to think properly. Something like this happened to me when I tried to write a review about Suicide Notes, but yeah, too high strong I couldn't clear my thoughts and write how much I actually loved the story. Love that even through the plagiarism thing, you still didn't take this out because this is wonderful and is wonderfully written and I hope you wouldn't mind me sharing a copy of this with my friends :)
I also like the name Cameron. It reminds me of someone (this dude I met on the internet who's good at dancing.) I will read more from you soon. You can make sure of that!
| Guest 6/28/12 . chapter 18
| LittleMonster13 6/12/12 . chapter 18
Oh. My. Gods.
I love this story. I screamed at the screen (out of joy and anger) the whole time. As usual.
It's a little creepy how similar Kait and I are. I fucking love her.
Brian and Cam are just... I fucking love them.
Leander is just... I fucking love him.
Enrique and Simon are just... I fucking love them.
Graham is just... bi. haha. I fucking love him.
The other gay couple? (Sorry, forgot names xD) I fucking love them.
Everyone I didn't mention, I FUCKING LOVE THEM!
Brian's fish? Yeah. I fucking love it too.
Get my point?
I fucking love you. And Kiyoshi.
Congrats on another amazing story -why did it take me so long to read this?
I'm an idiot.
I'm going to go read the sequel now.
Much fucking love,
P.S: I dunno why I used the word 'fucking' so much. I'm a freak.
| Liquid Colour 4/4/12 . chapter 17
This review goes for entire story
Okay then, I adored this story. 'Nuff said. The characters were beautifully created, and the time it took for the two of them to build their relationship was brilliant. I especially enjoyed the flip-flop between perspectives, even though I am a primarily Restricted Third Person writer.
I have to say that my favourite character was Brian. In my head, although he was this supposedly straight guy, I pictured a straightish looking guy, but was petite in build, but lean and muscular; dark skin, dark hair, and dark eyes (pretty much Italian). His personality was wonderful and I adored him sososo much.
I was confused on how to picture Cameron, though. At first I thought he was going to looking sort of like the generic uke of the story; tallish, femininely shaped, pale skin, and awesome emo-hair. But that was primarily because of the fact that he was the "gay" character of the story, but ya know, I was content with Brian being the adorable uke.
Kaitlyn was also a magnificent character. I liked her supporting role throughout. I pictured her being, tiny and petite (like you had made her seen), with palish skin, and lots of freckles. Like, she's a living freckle. Along with shiny, strawberry-blonde hair.
Anyway... The story was magnifique. I give it a 9/10 (mostly due to the fact that I didn't get a description of the characters, but I overlooked it because the story was A-M-A-Z-I-N-G). Bravo! *claps*
| Light.Is.Me 3/3/12 . chapter 18
That was sooo nice! I'm glad I finally finished it! Yay!
| Very Carefully 2/7/12 . chapter 7
WOO! LEANDER'S MY AGE! lol, don't know why I'm excited about that.
| SexyTangerine 2/1/12 . chapter 17
Yaayyyyy :D Can't wait fr the sequel! :D
| JDKlaus 1/25/12 . chapter 18
Wonderful! I just knew that Brian and Cam had to end up together. Was pretty rocky there for awhile but you came through! You are one hell of a writer, one of my favorites! Thanks.
| A.J. Saunders 12/28/11 . chapter 17
Ahh, I really loved this. I think the writing was better than in Rule 11 and Abomination, despite the fact that the story was less original. I liked the way the first few chapters were very story-telling style, before it eases into a more present tense story, although retaining the story-telling kind of style.
I don't usually like point of views switching constantly, but it really worked in this. The progressions were smooth and we were always well informed of who's viewpoint it was. Also, scenes were not repeated, something that annoys me. Only minor, important details were.
I guess another reason I loved this was because there's so much that made it seem real. There was so much that I could relate to. Especially after Brian has figured out he's gay and that Cam loves Lee. When he's talking about how he'll be alone in life, I know that feeling. For gay people, especially those who have experienced depression or low self esteem, it's very common. Yes, I would happen to be one of those people. There were a lot of other things in the story that I could relate to and I thought "Yes, it really is like that."
However, there were other things that I found were not so realistic. I will admit though, I'm the only gay person I've ever known (Or at least the only one that's not so far in the closet they're in fucking Narnia. Haha, I loved that line by the way. Being the only gay person I've ever known probably also contributed to my 'i'm going to be alone in life' feeling) so I'm only speaking from my personal experience. Brian's sudden realisation that he was gay annoyed me a bit. I just can't imagine it ever happening as a sudden realisation. It's something that you realise over a long period of time. Then after you realise it, it still takes time to accept it. Especially for someone who's had relations with a girl before.
Another thing which annoyed me was the cutting. Yes, I've experienced it. It's... I won't say common, because it's not but it's more prevalent in gay people than in straight people. I'm not trying to make this into a pity-gathering review, so don't worry. I'm simply trying to offer insight into topics I've had experience with. You just kind of brush it off in the story. "Oh he cut himself, no big deal." I understand that it was only a few times (Can be counted on one hand.) but even once is a big deal. Even if it's only once, it will continue to haunt you. Of course you move on, but you don't ever get over it. Moving on is different to forgetting about it. (Almost taking a quote from the story then, but in the story it was about love, not about depression.) Sure, you might not want to do it anymore, but it's always a part of you.
Well, those are my only two real complaints with the story, and it's mostly just about the portrayal of certain things. Of course, if you've never experienced them you can't be expected to get it perfect. But anyway, loved it!
| RedVines45 12/28/11 . chapter 18
Okay, I read this all in one night because it is AMAZING! You had me pulled in from the start and I just loved it. Can't wait to read the sequel! :D
| Enchantedflame 12/11/11 . chapter 18
I just now got the time to read this entire story. And it was wonderful by the way. Now I'm off to read the sequel!
| Nitya 12/9/11 . chapter 17
I couldn't stop reading it I really like your fiction 3
| Mitch16 12/2/11 . chapter 17
I'm reviewing the whole story as I only just began reading it today and finished it in two sittings. (My mum interrupted me to have dinner.) Now, to get started, I love writing gay characters and I also really love fag hags (and fag stags as well.) I'm gay so these stories are generally the ones that pop out to me first but generally I pass by them after I read the first chapter. Here's why I didn't pass by this and hopefully through out this review, I'll be able to give you some helpful tips that I've found extremely helpful when I've written gay characters.
Firstly, your writing structure is something that was able to grow on me very quickly. I love that you alternated between Cameron and Brian because they're two very different people which is important to have in your lead characters. Your two leads (especially if they're both gay) can't be similar people. The writing structure gave us some very interesting sort of things to go on through out the whole story. Brian is the only one who talks about the sex as it happens where as Cameron is very evasive in that regard.
Secondly, none of your characters are boring! I mean this, I truly do. None of your characters make me not care about them. (Apart from Enrique, Simon and Gerald, but I would very likely care so much more about them if they had any sort of lead/supporting role. Maybe they will later and they'll grow on me, but I don't care too much about them.
I'm going to break the good up now with a little bit of the bad and it hurts me to say this because I love the story but I did feel there was one major thing lacking. This is one of those things I've learned when writing gay characters. You can NOT make all the characters gay. Jason is the only current character who is straight, while that is not really a major problem if the story was short-form, this story is most certainly not short-form (and I'm so glad it's long-form, SO glad.) You need to insert a LEAD character who is a straight MALE soon. Maybe a next door neighbor who gains feelings for Kait. Kait is an amazing character by the way and a character that I truly appreciate. He doesn't even have to be increasingly supportive of Brain/Cameron, but it's important to have a straight male character for diversity and to also take away from how heavily LGBT the story currently is. Personally, one of my favourite characters was Eric, because of the fact that he was so straight. (And even if you want to turn him into a lead, I'd be comfortable with that.)
Thirdly, the minor characters, Jesus fucking christ! A story is just as strong as it's minor/minor supporting characters, or at least that's what I believe. By minor I mean Sarah, Cam's Mum (if she has a mentioned name and I just forget it, I'm sorry.), Sandra (where did she go?), Mike etc. Those characters seriously made the story increasingly fun for me. While I do really love and enjoy the impact those characters made, I'm also very glad that they didn't turn into main characters. They work better as minor/minor supporting characters, not because they wouldn't fit in the story as lead characters or recurring characters, but because they simply just work better as minor.
I'm a gay male. One of the things that peeve me the most about stories like this is when a characters outing/experiences aren't represented the way they should be, you had no problems with this in your story. Through out the story, there were some things that I questioned being gay myself but they were so few and far between that it did not bother me too much. The way Brian's sexuality was handled was really, really good. I personally really loved the explosion of emotions he had in the last few chapters leading up to 16. The way both of the characters sexualities (and the sexuality of Leander) were handled was that of a pro and I enjoyed reading and keeping up with it over the period of the story.
Now, Leander. I sincerely hope you find a way to put him into the sequel because he has a whole lot more potential than any of the other gay characters in the story (except Cameron and Brian.) He'd be finished his Senior Year now so I'd love for him to come back and cause some serious drama for our leads. I think it'd be very interesting to see him back with a somewhat new look and a grown-up attitude about him. Whether or not you've considered this, I do not know cause I'm not in your head, but it'd be great to have him back because he could truly affect the story in ways that you may not have thought of yet.
Now a semi-bad thing about the sequel and I hate that there is a bad thing about it, but it feels unauthentic. I loved it, do not get me wrong but I think it'd be better to stick to a certain time-period for at least ONE chapter. Otherwise it's going to get very jumpy and confusing-and they're going to be 90 by chapter 10.-but if you prefer to do it the way you currently you are, you will always have one dedicated reader in me, so you don't have to worry about that, but I do think it would only benefit you to write it with one period for each chapter. (I keep wanting to call them episodes cause I write scripts. c: If I do, please forgive me.) Also, if you do introduce another lead it might be great to give them a chapter or half a chapter here and there because it'd be good for us as readers to get an idea of what the hell other people think.
Dialogue. One of the major problems I have with most stories about gay people (And I've only found one or two stories before this one that has done this well 90% of the time (we all fall sometimes and go into the cheesy)) is that the dialogue can come across off extremely forced and extremely cheesy. The dialogue in the story you've given seems good a lot of the time and it doesn't go over the top 95% of the time which is something to be extremely proud of.
Now, I know you said that the sequel will be drabbles and I'm fine with that in a way but I don't want the story to become a drabble and to lose the authenticity of the original, so please try take what I said before and use this.
These are some things I'd really love to see happen to Cameron/Brain/Kait/Others. These are in no way suggestions, I'm just giving you some ideas of what I would do if I was the writer of this and I know that I am not and although I wish I was, this is completely yours and you can do what ever you want when it comes down to it.
- HIV scare for Cameron and Brian.
- Kait gets pregnant from cheating on Jason. (Eric/new lead)
- Leander comes back. I don't care how but I want him back in the story as a lead.
- Brian has some severe troubles figuring out what he wants to do with his life.
- Graham ends up with a girl.
There's a lot more and it depresses me that I can't think of any at this current point in time.
There is also a lot more I'd love to say, but I can't think of any more at this point in time, if I do you can rest assured that I will tell you. :)
Also, if you ever feel like it, and want to read some of my scripts, don't be against laughing. :D
Overall: I really adore the story, one of the best I've read lately and I will post it on my Tumblr so that some more people can read it. I will also get one of my semi-tumblr-famous people to re-blog it so that you get a heap of people reading it, because it's a story that deserves to be massive. Extremely well written and extremely developed. I can also tell you and I would get along really well if we talked. XD
On that note, my email address is or - I check both of those about equally but I use the smile one as my msn account so yeah, whatever you prefer. Great story and you seem like a great person. I'm always up for a chat. Thank you very much for introducing Cameron/Brian/Leander/Eric/Kait and etc. to the internet and I hope to talk to you soon.
| prostock69 11/30/11 . chapter 18
| falling-into-fate 11/25/11 . chapter 17
Oh my GOD. YES. Yes yes yes yessss! This was SO cute! x'D Ahh, wow, I have to say, this is my favorite story on fictionpress. You've also become my favorite author I was pleasantly surprised to see that you were the same author as one of the other stories I've read here (which I loved). :3 It was your story "Dead Wrong". I think I left a review on that story too. Anyway, this story had me giggling through it constantly! Hilarious! Like I walked in the bathroom to brush my teeth, and I almost choked on my toothbrush because I was still laughing! XD Sorry, I'm rambling. At first, I kinda liked Lee... But seeing how when Cam & him were together tortured Brian (He's my favorite character :D) broke my heart. I'm so happy that Cam and Brian got together like they did. I felt so bad for Cam a lot, too, especially in the beginning of the story when Brian was 'straight'. I've been reading this story since 7 pm, non-stop. It is now almost midnight. I re-read all my favorite parts (like the sex scene ;D), and it took me so long to finish. So worth it, though.
And don't even get me started on Kait.
x'DD I have never laughed so much over a character's reactions/thoughts the way I did with her! Lmao! She's just too funny. I love how she saw them all as her harem. xD
SEQUEL! We all NEEEEED a sequel for this, soon! xD I'm addicted to your writing. This story is just... Love. :'D
Can't wait! Amazing story!