as usually ace job!

Honestly, I found this refreshing. You painted a hauntingly beautiful picture with words. I can't help but wonder if the ending could be made more effective if there were stops or pauses written into it, such as in the form of a semi-colon or a mere comma. I'm no expert, but when the poetry doesn't rhyme, sometimes (like in your last paragraph) adding a bit of structure gives it more flow and feeling.

Just a suggestion though.

Wow that was so great to read. I feel like I could read this a hundred times and get something different out of it every time. I love when I come across poetry like that. Wonderfully written.

I really like the traffic light metaphor and the last line had a punch to it.

There is so much power, here. Your metaphors are like punches; some swift, others soft, but so ultimately debilitating.

I'm in love with your words.