|Reviews for Traffic|
| dokidokipanic 8/5/12 . chapter 1
as usually ace job!
| werberman 12/10/11 . chapter 1
Honestly, I found this refreshing. You painted a hauntingly beautiful picture with words. I can't help but wonder if the ending could be made more effective if there were stops or pauses written into it, such as in the form of a semi-colon or a mere comma. I'm no expert, but when the poetry doesn't rhyme, sometimes (like in your last paragraph) adding a bit of structure gives it more flow and feeling.
Just a suggestion though.
| Little girl Big world 11/20/11 . chapter 1
Wow that was so great to read. I feel like I could read this a hundred times and get something different out of it every time. I love when I come across poetry like that. Wonderfully written.
| recycle rhymes 11/16/11 . chapter 1
I really like the traffic light metaphor and the last line had a punch to it.
| D. Cowman 10/29/11 . chapter 1
There is so much power, here. Your metaphors are like punches; some swift, others soft, but so ultimately debilitating.
I'm in love with your words.