|Reviews for Magic of Love|
| Anxious Axolotl 8/13/12 . chapter 1
I think this is a very good prologue, a bit cliche but that's not always a bad thing! I think the opening sentence is a little too cliche though, especially calling her hair raven. My suggestion would be focus on the birth in the opening line rather than the queen's appearance. There are also too many characters left unnamed for most of this.
The dialogue was quite well done I thought, other than a few lines which seemed a little out of character/out of place. Such as ["Did my mother say good bye to me? If yes, then why?"] seemed really formal for a young boy, especially for a young boy thinking to himself. Maybe something like ["Did my mother say good bye to me? I wonder what she'd say goodbye to me for"] would sound more natural. Also, I think the guard who was meant to be guarding the queen might have more to say than 'I'm sorry' if the queen was discovered missing on his watch (the security in this castle seems pretty sketchy!).
There were a few minor errors I'll list so you can fix them if/when you choose to edit:
- [The raven haired young woman laid on her bed] - 'laid' should be 'lay
- [What do you meant] - 'mean', not 'meant'
- ["My King, she was gone. I sorry!"] - I said before, I think something like 'my sincerest apology' might be better, but if you really want to keep this line, it should read 'I'm sorry'
There didn't seem to be a lot of method as to what was italicized and what wasn't, or maybe I just didn't figure it out. I thought this was a pretty good introduction and I look forward to reading the rest of this when I have time! I'm not usually one for romance stores, but this looks quite intriguing.
| Crystal 99 7/20/12 . chapter 31
I hope there is some way to break the curse. Can't wait to read more. Please update soon. :)
| Guest 7/16/12 . chapter 30
Great chapter. Can't wait to read more. Please update soon. :)
| Guest 7/16/12 . chapter 29
I don't like the sound of that curse. I hope it doesn't come to true. Poor Sumlalee and Joo - chan.
| Crystal 99 7/13/12 . chapter 28
I wish Xiaojie would just disappear and leave Joo - chan and Sumlalee alone. Anyway, can't wait to read more. Please update soon. Great chapter. :)
| Crystal 99 6/25/12 . chapter 27
Great chapter. I can't wait to find out what happens next. Please update soon. :)
| Curlysquirt95 6/16/12 . chapter 26
Hopefully Xiaojie doesn't hurt Sumlalee. Nice chapter :)
| Crystal 99 6/16/12 . chapter 26
Great chapter. I always enjoy the scenes with Joo - chan and Sumlalee. Can't wait until they get married. Please update again soon. :)
| Curlysquirt95 6/14/12 . chapter 25
Hopefully she doesn't die from the poison covering her wedding dress. :( nice chapter! :)
| Curlysquirt95 6/14/12 . chapter 24
I'm glad Sumlalee got her voice back and her gift sounds wonderful. :) great chapter :)
| Curlysquirt95 6/14/12 . chapter 23
Hopefully Sumlalee's voice comes back and she likes her Christmas gift. Nice chapter! :)
| Crystal 99 6/10/12 . chapter 25
Glad you were able to update. Did I mention that I hate Xiaojie? Anyway, can't wait to read more. Please update soon. :)
| Crystal 99 6/6/12 . chapter 24
Great chapter. Can't wait to read more. Please update again soon.
| Crystal 99 6/3/12 . chapter 23
Someone really needs to get rid of Xioajie. Anyway, great chapter. I hope Sumlalee gets her voice back soon. Can't wait to read more. Looking forward to the update on Wednesday. :)
| Crystal 99 5/31/12 . chapter 22
Great chapter. I can't wait to read more. Please update again soon. :)