No! Don't leave it there! I was just getting into it and then it FINISHED!

One thing I would say, check your punctuation when writing speech.

It needs to say, for example:

"No," I said. OR "No," he said.

Use a comma as the speech and the whoever said it bit is all one sentence.

And for exclamation marks, it's much the same:

"No!" he said. Etc. Please update soon! :)