Holy shit, this gave me chills. I applaud you.

Good Heavens. That left me breathless. and a little nervous. How easy it is to trigger a scream...this is wonderful writing.

This is beautiful in a wierd way. It's raw and powerful and far too true

I'm not sure why, but this is awesome! I just think you need to format it differently. To me it's just showing up like a paragraph. I'm pretty sure you meant it to be in multiple lines but it's not showing up like that.

But anyways, I love it! Sent a shiver up my spin! lol

or let them in?