|Reviews for Unexpected|
| Jude Diamond 5/14/13 . chapter 11
I have a feeling Loryn is going to be one of those girls who does everything she can to ruin her ex's life after she gets dumped. I hate that so much.
| vcdwhite 4/7/13 . chapter 30
i love this story soo much! The plot is really well thought! Are you gonna make a sequel to this? coz you said you might write a sequel on Ryan's POV... I hope you would...best of luck!
| Gmork 3/5/13 . chapter 30
This whole story was fucking brilliant. My heart broke for them, and I related to James every single chapter along the way. It heart wrenching,but so real and refreshing. 3
| underlay 2/12/13 . chapter 30
i really enjoyed this story! i'm gutted that it didn't go well with james's parents, but he and ryan are just so adorabubble. brillianteeeee (i can spell...)
| R.P. Ann 1/25/13 . chapter 6
I always review after I read something, so here I am.
I don't know if I'll finish reading your story because:
1. I find that the character's reactions are too unreal.
2. The lack of connection you present to your characters and words.
1st point, and I say this because I am bisexual, therefore I should know how James is feeling and I have quite a lot of gay friends and I've read my fair share of slash, and I find that his reactions are too... too plastic (as in, fake). You can't just be curious, experiment for THREE WEEKS knowing you like it and then suddenly be like, no uh, no way in hell. It's not a switch, even if it is a decision (to accept it or not). Also, his thoughts are way too jumbled, too confusing, too going from one extreme to the other. Also, I find your characters lacking depth and definition.
2nd, and last point; a writer needs to move their readers with their words, feel them up with emotion, make them cry, laugh and make them angry. And I, still, haven't felt any connection to your story and I can't feel yours to it, either.
I know you can improve, so do it.
I might finish this story as I might be reading more of you.
| ME 1/5/13 . chapter 30
Awesome! Amazing story, a great read. I bowled through it in less then 4 hours straight (pun intended) and i loved it! Thanks for writing and uploading this!
| KatieBobb 11/6/12 . chapter 30
I believe at some point you said that this was a lot of fluff but it definitely turned out to be not so fluffy. I'm sad to see the boys go, but this will remain one of my favorites. Thanks for posting your work for us readers ;)
| KatieBobb 11/6/12 . chapter 28
I like Loryn's conclusion
| KatieBobb 11/6/12 . chapter 26
Oh my God, my stomach totally dropped at the end of this chapter... Poor James.
| KatieBobb 11/6/12 . chapter 23
This was a fangirl squealy chapter for sure :) Loved it a ton!
| KatieBobb 11/6/12 . chapter 22
I didn't really like this chapter. I was annoyed that he had to ask his parents permission to go be with a friend for spring break. I get really nuts about stuff like that, he's grown he should be able to do what he wants... I suppose it's my whole 'it's your life' you should be able to do what you want thing. I'm just really high strung I suppose. But you should respect you parents and all that yeah, unless they're total asshats
| KatieBobb 11/6/12 . chapter 20
I think that this was a really cute coming out scene and I really liked Lola :)
| KatieBobb 11/6/12 . chapter 19
Not too much sex, it goes with the storyline. And I'm super looking forward to the big reveal. That's my favorite part :)
| KatieBobb 11/6/12 . chapter 13
| KatieBobb 11/6/12 . chapter 8
Yes! Love sequels!