This was a very good story.
The most thing that I enjoyed is the fact that you strayed away from all the stereotypes.
I was so surprised by many characters. The whole time, I was predicting what is going to happen, and you would surprise me.
Your evil girl isn't the typical evil character we'd expect. Not whiny, bitchy, nor does she have her nose in the air. I liked her. I really did. She was evil in a smart way. I actually understand why people follow her and are fascinated by her. I understand her power.

Then the whole Jeremy and Katie story, which I first thought was genuine mutual attraction. Again, I thought Alaina was pure evil and Jeremy was trapped. I was so mad at first that he was ignoring Katie. I thought they'd end up together. But then, when Jeremy's sister showed up. I knew I had read everything wrong.
Just so many awesome, fresh, realistic characters.

I also love how, for once, a character was smart enough to know that talking would solve everything. I always get annoyed by all the miscommunications that happen in other stories and how easily it would all be solved if the character just stopped being stupid and went to talk to the other person. That's why when Jess decided to go talk to Nolan I wanted to jump in utter joy.
Of course, also, pretty good job on the development of those two. Their relationship did seem to stem from genuine interest on Nolan's part. Usually, with stories like these, the relationship blows up fast, and gets intimate too fast. It was nice for once that the "badass" guy didn't sleep around, nor was he known for being a womanizer. I loved how things escalated for them. You managed to keep it interesting without adding all the unnecessary sexual tension. They had the perfect amount.
My favorite moment is when they're in the park lying down and he asks her on their first date.

Then, you add those secondary stories, and the whole story just comes together nicely. I loved loved loved Shannon's story. I loved Katie's story. I loved Alaina and Jeremy, though those two aren't really secondary.

The only criticism I have is Katie. She ended up just being there for the plot. We didn't see any closure between her and Jeremy. We didn't really see her story wrap up. She was just there. She was a weak character, I felt. It would've been nice to see her develop, especially since a lot of people can relate to what happened to her. I also felt Alaina's apology to her was ... well... mellow, after all what she put the girl through, even though she didn't deserve it, I expected a grander gesture. But then, we only heard Katie's version of the conversation, so maybe some more was said.

All in all. It was a pleasure to read. It flowed nicely. All the characters were interesting.
And I read it when I should've been studying for a big final. :P I don't regret it though. One of the best stories I've read on here since a long time. :)

oh ps lol the guest that just reviewed was me :))

THIS IS ACTUALLY THE BEST STORY ON FICTIONPRESS! im so sad its over, thankyou so much for giving me the this gift of a story honestly!

I love everything about it and im so happy nolan and jess are together and jess and alaina are okay now! Please don't let it end here..please PLEASE put up a continuation of something, anything to do with the BOllinger characters because its so good and it can't end here! :) so great i can't get over it

I love your story. If it were me I would've added a bit of drama with sam coming and finding them at an awkward time. But it's denfinatly my fave finction press story.

That was such a cute story! I was really rooting for Jess. Nice writing!

I can't believe this is actually finished! I did love the ending, Nolan is so sweet. It was all wrapped up nicely I think. I would love to read about Shannon and Chris' story, you kind of get a bit of closure on Alaina and Jeremy but you don't get anything on Shannon and Chris. Looking forward to whatever it is you write next.

This story was great! I absolutely love it, and you have amazing writing skills! I can't even comprehend how well written this was :) the plt was great and it was all played out so nicely. I could definitely see you as a successful author.
About Shannon and Chris, I'd LOVE to see where their story goes! I really wanted things to resolve between them! So I hope to see that in a future story n_n

You never really mentioned what happened with Chris and Shannon; will they be having their own story, or will this just be one of the many mysteries left on FictionPress? I'm quite curious.

[I rolled my eyes at the last part. "As if I need another one of you walking around,"] You put a comma at the end, but I think it should've been a period, seeing as that's ending the sentence and there was no "she said" or "he said" after it.

I liked Alaina a lot, too, but I honestly think I liked Sam the best. You didn't mention Sam very much in the story, only the first chapter or so, but I got the "overprotective older brother" vibe pretty clearly from him. It's always the big brothers that I like the best, to be honest. They make things interesting. This was actually the first story that I read when I came into FP, so I don't know how I feel about it ending. I'm glad that I don't have to wait for more updates, but I'll miss Jessica and Nolan.

-WTGC

Nolan - great name and officially one of my all-time favourite male leads. Loved your story :)

AMAZING STORY!

pleaseeee put the epilogue up soon! im dying here!

Aw I'm gonna really miss this story and all the drama :) It was so fabulously well written and I completely fell in love with the characters :) The plot was great and I really enjoyed getting to see the story unfold with Jeremy and Alaina and of course with Nolan and Jess :)

Great job with the story. And Congrats on finishing it! Cannot wait for the epilogue :)

Cant wait for the last chapter :) yay

Eeeee! I really do love me some Nolan.
I noticed a couple of typo's in this chapter - at one point Nolan licks Jess' lips (although, that probably was what he was wanting to lick ;)) and this sentence "I watched his movement, fighting a very strange words to run my hands through his hair and kiss him."
Didn't notice anything else though and it was as brilliant as ever!
Cannot believe that there is only the epilogue left... that's just not fair :( I've thoroughly loved this story and hopefully when this is finished you will go onto writing something else.

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