|Reviews for Brooding Guy, Quiet Girl|
| TheGrayKid 7/21/12 . chapter 1
So I guess I like this. The base idea of taking two really antisocial characters and paring them up seems pretty cool.
That cute moment during the end, was pretty cool. But its impact is offset by Reiji kind of being an asshole just before that moment. With him thinking “Dumbass” when she falls over, I can understand him not really caring but that was too rash of a reaction.
There is a real problem with the grammar of your tenses. Almost every paragraph you slip at least once from past to present, which is really jarring.
You’re jokes are funny most of the time, but there are problems sometimes. You’re obviously inspired by anime which is fine, but anime is a visual medium and some visual jokes that would work there don’t work here. For example Shion’s face onto her fall.
| DevilPogoStick 7/21/12 . chapter 4
Okay...I finally realize what this story meant when they said everyone else is either insane or...Even more insane. You would have thought I picked it up by now. O_o
Nevertheless, this makes the story even more interesting...And Benkei, people have to break stereotypes once in a while...Don't be a dick. LOL
Keep up the good work!
| DevilPogoStick 7/21/12 . chapter 3
lol, seeing that long nice description...All in his head was awesome and funny.
I ended up loving the banter between Shion and Benkei as well as Reiji and Alice...Well, actually having a decent conversation without the weirdness. :)
Keep up the good work!
| Kisho 7/21/12 . chapter 9
Ohhhh, so that's what's up with Reiji's background, nya o3o
Hehe, didn't you say something like that regular people might get into the school based on grades a looong time ago, and something vague like that they might play a part in the story? Heeeh, Edge-kun is tricky, nya xD
Still, if there's someone who'll get him out of his loneliness, nya, it'll be Alice! And then they'll fall in love and be together forever, nya ;u;b
... /ahem/ Sorry -v-;
| Kisho 7/21/12 . chapter 8
Heeeh, so this is how it's turning out, huh? Kendo club, nya? Heeeh, well, all according to Shion's devious plan, nya :'D
Still, I get the feeling that even in the kendo club, they probably won't do much kendo xP
Still, sounds like fun with everyone together in the club, at least, nya! cx
... (Aoki should stop putting these things in my head, though, nya ;w;)
| Kisho 7/21/12 . chapter 7
Pfffffhaha, Reiji is actually the - woooow xD
Nice ending, nya, I approve :'D
Aaah, I love how you're developing the characters and all, nya, it's super-fun reading along, nya c'x
Now I just haave to know more about Reiji, all about him and his job at a cosplay cafe xD
| Kisho 7/21/12 . chapter 6
Hehe, this was a cute chapterrrr Cx
Nice having some background on Shion and Benkei, nya, childhood friends, that's the cutest thing x3
(Although, thinking of child Benkei, all I can think of is a small Benkei, still perverted and wearing a tuxedo, nya ;u;)
But still, Shion possibly actually a lesbian, nya xD
Fuuuun, anyway, time to go read more cx
| DevilPogoStick 7/21/12 . chapter 2
My god...That was hilarious! XD
I was laughing to myself just how the writing format tends to either go normally...Or become bizarre in a good way.
Don't interrupt narration indeed. lol
Keep up the good work!
| Lord Slayer 7/21/12 . chapter 12
lol, while the attempt at a twist ending is comendable it was pretty obvious from the first paragraph that this was a dream.
| Lord Slayer 7/21/12 . chapter 11
But why would Reiji be glad about Alice poking and prodding into his business? It's one of the pivotal moments of a romance. When you have a "brooding guy," type like Reiji, it's usually because he has stuff in his life he doesn't want to discuss with anyone, and him (justifiably) being upset about the girl trying to pry into his affairs is usually part of the process of getting him to open up; as this usually leads either to a confession or to him later realizing that he was overly harsh and then trying to make up for it later.
| Lord Slayer 7/20/12 . chapter 10
Just now noticed this chapter that this hasn't been a romantic comedy for a long while. Now it's just straight up comedy.
| Lord Slayer 7/20/12 . chapter 9
It'll be pretty hard to win nationals if all the kendo club does is watch tv and sleep on the tatami mats, hehe.
| DevilPogoStick 7/20/12 . chapter 1
Alright, finally got to read BG, QG!
This is a very interesting piece that's building up...Much kudos to that.
I like the humor and the characters and their...Interesting interactions. lol
Can't wait to read more! Keep up the great work!
| Lord Slayer 7/19/12 . chapter 8
Maybe the real reason the teachers wanted to shut down the kendo club is because they don't do anything?
Be careful about mixing tenses, you did it a bit at the beginning, but it was just the one time.
| Lord Slayer 7/19/12 . chapter 7
Such a strange group of people.