|Reviews for Brooding Guy, Quiet Girl|
| Keimei-chan 7/18/12 . chapter 1
I'm loving your use of references here.
I'm glad to know they're both socially awkward :) It makes me feel like I'm not alone.
| Kisho 7/18/12 . chapter 5
Pffffft, Alice molesting Reiji, huh? Welllll, I didn't see that coming, nya :'D
Still, the running gags are as fun as they always are, nya! Aah, I feel sorry for Reiji and the location of his room, nya ;u;
Still, I wonder what really is up with Shion there, at the end of the... second segment, nya ouo
I bet it really is Shion/Alice CX /hit
| Guest 7/18/12 . chapter 3
Heh, your characters have a strange obsession with food.
| Lord Slayer 7/17/12 . chapter 2
Aah! Author commentses in the prose! It hurts our eyeses, precious! Breaking the fourth wall is one my favorite gags, but it should be used sparingly. Props for having the narrator initiate it, though. You should also be careful about switching between tenses, which you do with an alarming amount of frequency.
| VJ-san 7/17/12 . chapter 12
What? No more specials? But I liked this one; it made me lol. Also, yeah total mind screw; Reiji being his own father and Alice being his mother. Weird turn of events. Oh well, I liked this one, great work!
| VJ-san 7/17/12 . chapter 11
I'm glad everything worked out. Reiji, having no since of direction? Pfft. I bet the restaurant he gave was the cosplay place. It'll be great I'm sure.
| mjinx 7/17/12 . chapter 3
Still funny, but the narration is fine without the 4th-wall breaking. YES, it is. xD
Reiji and his notebook, Benkei and his hand, Shion and her club, you have really unique and probably insane characters. Not that it's a bad thing. Hehe.
Okay, good chapters so far. Still looking forward for more.
| mjinx 7/17/12 . chapter 2
Another good chapter. I love the scene in the end with Reiji and Alice. They're proving to be a really cute couple.
Shion and Benkei are one funny pair, though. xD
| VJ-san 7/17/12 . chapter 10
Now I feel bad for Alice. Poor girl.
| VJ-san 7/17/12 . chapter 9
Poor Reiji. That's all I really have to say about this. Although I do like the character development that happened in thia chapter. -w-b
| VJ-san 7/17/12 . chapter 8
Heeehee, womanly ways equal blackmailing? Ha! And Reiji having no last name? Will that come into play? And, before I forget, that mecha anime Suzaku keeps talking about; your other story? Shameless promoter you! Anyways, good chapter.
| VJ-san 7/17/12 . chapter 7
Dude! Reiji can cook? My kind of man, jk. But yeah, cosplaying cafes sound awesome! I also like sleepy head Alice and the cliffhanger at the end was great.
| VJ-san 7/16/12 . chapter 6
This chapter was super funny! I get the feeling that Shion actually doesn't like her flat chest. And Reiji and Alice, where will their relationship lead? Hm? Also, the end! The end was also very funny! Masaya getting his own spin off story, I also love how you just made the typo apart of the story. On to the next chapter.
| Guest 7/16/12 . chapter 5
Why do you always eavesdrop when all you hear are bad things. Haha, it's funny though. Alright, I wonder what Shion was worried about at lunch and why is Alice molesting Reiji? I DEMAND ANSWERS!
But yeah, good chapter.
| Lord Slayer 7/16/12 . chapter 1
You need to work on your clencher line. The first line or paragraph should be something, an event, a line, a thought, a description, anything, that grabs the reader's attention and makes them want to keep reading. The clencher for this story was not particularly attention grabbing.
I would also recommend that you not put thoughts in parenthesis. I found them a bit distracting.
However, the ending was pretty cute and silly, so good work on that.