|Reviews for Brooding Guy, Quiet Girl|
| Brendan Rizzo 5/13/12 . chapter 2
Heh. Perverse Benkei is perverse.
Oh, and SHION MUST GET MORE ATTENTION. She is the manliest female character I have ever come across.
| Brendan Rizzo 5/13/12 . chapter 1
Well you reviewed my story, so I'll review yours.
I think you should improve your summary-writing skills, because that summary probably turned some people off. Your story is brilliant, but the summary kind of makes people think it's gonna be one of those painful-to-read, non-humorous stories that teenage girls write. Maybe you should change the summary around to get more reviews?
The summary is the only thing about the fic that I don't like. This was a brilliant crackfic, and I am definitely favoriting this.
| Iceleaf 5/12/12 . chapter 6
I do like that this narrater descibes things better though.
And I kind of like your story. But all those impolite refferences are somewhat bothersome.
| Iceleaf 5/12/12 . chapter 3
I think I liked the first narrater better. Not that there is anything wrong with this one but the story feels different now.
And I liked the narrater jokes.
| Genesis Gurren 5/6/12 . chapter 4
Yo, it is me again. Will be reviewing chapter 2-4 here. Ehem.
Great story! I might say I like the character interactions. It is lively and dynamic and it is easy for the reader to be absorbed into the world you have created.
Compared with the first chapter, the randomness is getting more and more bearable and less annoying. Your writing style improved significantly in every chapter and I hope you stay it that way.
And I still understand every single reference you made which helps in delivering the epic punchlines of your jokes.
I hope you keep on writing and here is a tip: Write down the bio of every character and their history and personality so you won't lose track of it. It is weird seeing a character acting outside their personality so suddenly.
| Genesis Gurren 5/5/12 . chapter 1
Hahaha! I laughed at the first chapter. An admirable feat indeed. You have a funny and relaxed writing style though there are grammar mistakes and vocabulary errors here and there.
I love your references on various animes and games. There are Gekkoukan High from Persona 3, Code Geass, Shion is a female Kamina from Gurren Lagann (my handle name is inspired from Gurren Lagann) and Benkei sounds similar to Barney from How I Met Your Mother.
One thing that disturbs me is the narration. Though it gives the relaxed and humorous feel but I think it is too random and trying to hard to be funny. Though it may seems like a minor thing, it can turn off some readers who didn't came from an anime-rich life (which randomness is our middle name)
Great chapter! Will be reviewing the next chapter as soon as I finish writing my chapter first.
| Tigers and Melons 5/2/12 . chapter 3
OH! hah yugioh abridged series! that made me laugh! your humor is impeccable!
| Tigers and Melons 5/1/12 . chapter 1
You're a very natural writer! I like how the characterse think very normally! And what's even better is that they aren't Mary sues! please update more!
| Thundy 4/10/12 . chapter 5
More chapters! More chapters! D:
Seriously, this is some great stuff you've written, Rags xD
Can't wait to see more!
| Thundy 4/10/12 . chapter 3
Omg I love this story xD
The story is getting great and it has a nice share of humor as well xD
Now to read the rest!
| Kisho 3/31/12 . chapter 4
Nyaa, I liked the chapter shorter like that, nya, much more readable, nya x3
Nyaa, more character development is always good, nya xP Fun chapter, nya, I like Reiji and Yukino's interactions, nya Nihaha, Number 2, that's just sad, nya xD
Nyuu, keep writing, nya More chapters like this, nya, short and readable With character development And Benkei being a perverted idiot, nya xD
| Kisho 3/31/12 . chapter 3
Nihaha, I thought I had read three chapters of this, but apparently not, nya xD
Fun chapter, though, nya Very smoothly transitioned to get rid of the narration gags, nya xD
Still, nya, I really like your character development, nya I feel like I'm getting to know Reiji and Alice just the same way as they're getting to know each other, nya, it really makes me feel for their friendship, nya... awkward as it may still be, nya xD
Anyway, on to chapter 4, nya vb
| SakuraGirl45 3/29/12 . chapter 4
Oh God, I find this story hilarious! The thing Benkei said about boobs...I was laughing my head off! I also like Renji and Alice's characters very much! Can't wait till the next chapter!
| Author's notes 3/29/12 . chapter 4
To all those who were confused this chapter, Kenta was going to be Masaya's name, but was changed at the eleventh hour. I've fixed it, but that doesn't mean I wouldn't turn it into s running gag.
| VJ-san 3/28/12 . chapter 4
This story made me LOL a lot. I am however, confused as to why everyone hates Reiji so much but I'm assuming that will come at a later date so I'll just wait.
Shion and Benkei are very funny and I like them a lot. Can't wait to see more of them. Oh, also...who's Kenta and who's Masaya? I'm confused on that part too.
Since I love fourth wall jokes the narration is funny too. It'll be interesting to see how you work in the romance part with this type of narration so I'll be waiting. Until next time!