THAT WAS AWESOME! WOOOOOOOOOOAH!

Dun dun dun! And the mystery deepens! Ha ha, awesome

yuuri's cool, i hope she comes back. will she come back?

I love your ending! This was such an amazing story to read :)

Ekkkkkkkk! This should be published and put on a shelf! But AM I GLAD IT WASN'T... because if it was... I might have missed out on this AMAZING story! The best story I have seen on here! Ekkkkk! Hehehehee! Ah! Love it! Book 2 better be put out soon... OR ELSE. Just kidding! But PLEASE update soon! I might actually die of anticipation if you don't! You are a GREAT writer! During the story of mind was wandering everywhere! In the beginning I was like "OMG Rik and fire girl over here should totally get together!" and then at that one part I was like "OooOoo Oh. My. GODS! Zi is Cody, right? RIGHT?" Hehehee. Please don't kill Zi! Ohhhhh! I hope Zi and them band together! Greatest job ever... seriously. Hope you update soon!

Juliet :D

nice fight scene, well done. i like the name ambi, it reminds me of a pokemon. which one was that...? the one with the hand on its tail. amphi? ambi? grr, i can't remember

this is an awesome story! where'd you get the idea for it?

Very interesting chapter, but I'm sorry to say that at the moment. I can't sit still for very long... and my attention span has decresed rapidly recently... so I don't know when I'll be on my computer long enough to review again. But in general good chapter. Good explanation, believable reactions. :) Great job. :)

yay finnally i got to review, i read whole story and then forgot to leave reviews, so yeah sorry

Good second chapter, strong writers voice and good character development. The new characters seem interesting. Does Xia have a specific trait? Like OCD or something about her personality that makes her unique? Play that up. Play the crap out of it, becuse it's that that'll make Xia pop! I really enjoyed this chapter. Good job! Well, I'm going to carry on reading now. :)

Very interesting first chapter, if this were the first chapter of a book, I'd be hooked. My only CC is that, I wou'd've preferred a bit more dialogue but even then, there was still a good balance. I really enjoyed this chapter, and now I'm going to carry on reading this interesting story. :)