I loved the alliteration in the first stanza. It fit perfectly with the theme of the piece.

In the second stanza the second line through me a bit. I couldn't tell what the sound referred to. Was it going all the way back to the footsteps? Or was it something else? It just sort of confused me...

Other than that, nice job!

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Lovely. I love the diction.