wow. i understand you are killing the ducks but you explain it so beautifully it takes away from the violence. to be honest, i like actiony\violent books, but i like art as well. nicely done :)
-steph135

this is cool! described so well i feel like im there! i've always wanted to go hunting to so this is perfect for me. :P
-steph135

ha i loved it, awesome! suddenly i was in my own woods decked out in camo hunting deer or turkey orr whatever the season is, i felt the chill before the adrenil with you, how every thing goes hush while you have that moment of focus. Very relatable. very vivd again, you know right where your going and how to take us there with you. Excellent work

Very good metaphors here. You're right, not only is the sight beautiful, but so is your writing, good job.

This is super cool. You like hunting huh? That's awesome. You're a really good writer and I hope you get inspired more often :p

This is soo good! It's so great how you make something like hunting sound so gracful and wonderful. I really liked all the description and how you compared it to world war 2. :D

awesome work making your hunting trip into a book.

(p.s. this is Bryson)

This is amazing. It's so detailed, and I really like how you make similes. It really makes it easy to read and creates a very descriptive picture of the scene.

You honestly make hunting sound like the most wonderful thing in the world.

Once again very good :). I love the details that you have here it makes you feel like you are really there yourself. I think that you are very good at writing and I can't wait for more :)

Again, great, great job! I loved how you compared waiting for the ducks to WWII. There was great imagery; I could really see every single detail that you wrote which made the scene more enjoyable and more believable. I also liked the way that you percieved and describe the cold. Truly amazing details. Please, keep writing and I hope to see another chapter soon!

E Panda :)

Whoa! That was like... amazing! :D It's so good. I love how you compared it to WWII and the bombers. The ending line was so poetic - I love it! :) Nice job writing.

Hello there! :3

This was soooo good! Dude, you have an amazing talent! Your imagery is amazing. I can feel my fingers getting frostbite, which is a good thing! :P The simile of birds and bombers is genius - this was fantastic!

Overall, great job!

Lyric

This was good! Good job, I liked it!

This is really good. I love how detailed it is. Definitely keep writing, because I want to read more.

Great job for your first story! You really do have a lot of potential and I hope you know that. Just remember that whenever you write dialogue, you have to start a new paragraph. If you don't know what I'm talking about then PM me and ask. I promise I'll reply soon. Please keep writing; I hope to see more from you!

E panda :)