Well, if an angel can come down from heaven to have a relationship with a human, why not the moon?

This was very cute and whimsical, the epitome of imaginative fantasy.

I think the mixture within Darien's character of wisdom and knowledge coupled with his unique innocence is delightful and interesting, and it works well in this story. I don't know if Clayton would have found his way "home" if Darien HAD been all-knowing and needed no assistance whatsoever. I do know the story wouldn't have been as precious and Darien wouldn't have been as interesting.

I wouldn't necessarily regard this as slash, however, even though Clayton is gay. It's more a tale of love and acceptance than sexuality, just that the main character happened to be gay. I didn't get a sense of Darien being gay so much as just "being," which is beautiful in itself.

All in all, this is a lovely story and makes me wish I had a Darien.

That was very sweet. Thank your for sharing :)

I don't read fantasy/supernatural that much, but I enjoyed reading this. I just think the idea of the moon being the guardian of a boy very cool. The story was very sweet, much less sad than I thought it would be :)

Honunjama told me to read this, and I'm glad she did :) I finished it a few nights ago, and then later I found myself looking up at the moon. There was a little question mark over my head, going 'why does this feel so intimate and familiar?'

Oh yeah! Darien... I am a little bit slow sometimes. But anyway, the point is, your story gave me a new appreciation for an old and familiar friend. I adored your personification of the moon. The concept of the sun, moon and sky as thinking, feeling beings, seems so ancient and closely linked to our humanity. I feel half certain you are referencing some famous piece of old literature, but I'm not well versed so I can't say for sure.

In the intro, Clayton's interaction with the night sky is lovely. What a beautiful way of putting it. Reaching that space, the nothingness between the stars. I think about that emptiness often, and how it relates to sleep, and death, and even the space between our own atoms. I felt Clayton's heart when he reached out to that space in his despair.

Darien is lovely, with his bright smile and purity. It's interesting that you chose a male to play the role so often attributed to a female. But when it comes to heavenly bodies, genitilia hasn't got much to do with it. In the end, Darien was not a sexual creature. It seems like he was just taking the form Clayton needed him to take.

I found Darien's ignorance both charming and disturbing. He became a good mirror on our social norms. Things that seemed only natural human gestures to him, to us are actually layered with complex sexual implications. Some times I look at the world through Darien's eyes. But when I suffer the social consequences, I feel more like Clayton, isolated and embarrassed.

That said, I was a little uncomfortable with Darien as a character. While he had full use of language and a mature body, in every other aspect he is like a small child. He is so perfectly pure and dependent, and so completely absorbed in Clayton. I'm having a hard time putting into words why this makes me uncomfortable. Maybe because these qualities make him into a kind of sexual fantasy. Maybe he seems too "easy." I loved him anyway, he was sweet and silly and made me smile.

With the spider web, you came around full-circle to touch on the mysterious beautiful concepts that were touched on in the intro. Lovely imagery, lovely thoughts. At the beginning, Clayton reaches this place out of despair; by the end he reaches it out of love for the earth, and so he makes his way home.

I loved that this story made me want to look at the sky. I love that it made me think about life, the universe and everything. I love the sense of Clayton's safe sweet journey, cascading gently from the fearful space between the stars into the loving arms of earth.

So... Well done!

QQ this was sooooo beautiful QQ
Especially since I'm such a hopeless romantic...
AmazinG!
Amazing concept, amazing skills, amazing story!
I don't even know what else to say?
I kind of wished to see more of Darien and Clay... but guess it wasn't meant to be *damn destiny...oh that's you... errmmm... oki don't damn it* But maybe more of Clay and nathan QQ ehhhh
AMAZING!
Cheers
Sky.

thank you for the beautiful story. it made me all warm and fuzzy inside... just like when i had my frist crushes in high school! hahahahaha

This is rather my favourite of your stories, which proves categorically that I'm a sap. Oh well.

The movie you speak of wouldn't happen to be "Occurence at Owl Creek Bridge" would it? I didn't know they made a film of it.

Anyhow, keep writing, and I'll keep reading, etc.

I love this. Every single bit. I love the concept, which is truly original. I adore the descriptions. The plot. EVERYTHING

The one thing I will complain about, though, was that Darien had to leave Clayton alone. Made me spaz out.

Darkest Bliss

I want a sequel! Ahhhhhh! Excellent work!

Ooooh. Awwww. That was just. ..so darn cute!

I'm in love with this!

That was beautiful. I loved it. Good work.

Ah, this was lovely.

I love the simple relationship of them both, and the way you worked the parting was really beautiful - I could just see Darien as he said it. I also really enjoyed the time skip at the end and happy reflections. A well-wrapped story.

Originally I thought it would be more angsty and that there would be more made of Clayton's suicidal tendencies, perhaps a momentary relapse where he holds the gun and looks at it reflectively or something, but I think I might be a little too accustomed to seeing fully worked-in heart-wrenching angst. I like the way this worked, I really did, and I look forward to reading your future projects.

:'( its over, and darien..and Clayton...and and and, oooohhhhhh! This was really good! Though there is one thing to complain about, they aren't together! :( ooh

awww, such a bittersweet ending!

lovely, though. I love the silly Moon, and when he talks to the plant. Lovely story.

And beautiful writing, describing the protagonist's breakthrough right before Darien leaves, and at the beginning, the description of his ascent to the heavenly bodies is beautiful.