|Reviews for Internet Fire!|
| Vivace.Assai 4/1/12 . chapter 14
Another great chapter. Your humor is rather contagious, and the characters are so diverse and hilarious to read about. Every time I read this story, I just feel so happy and giddy. It's a definitely a fun story.
As for any concrit, I would like to see more descriptions in the story. I've been enjoying the humor so much that it took this chapter for me to realize that I don't really have any idea what this game world looks like. Now, I'm a person who is really bad at visualizing things without any description to tell me. So, descriptions would really expand on this interesting computer world and make paragraph length more varied.
Overall, great chapter. I really enjoyed it!
Thanks for the great read!
| Vivace.Assai 3/19/12 . chapter 13
Great chapter! I really thought it was interesting, especially since it pretty much progressed the plot. Everything is really starting to get exciting, and I only cry because this fun chapter was so short... I wanted more... :(
I loved the humor by the way. It always makes this story such an enjoyable read because while there is action, there is also good fun humor. I always find myself laughing whenever I read a chapter of this.
Thanks for the interesting read!
| Lolitroy 3/5/12 . chapter 12
Awesome story :D very funny
Keep it up! And it's kind of poetic...
| Do Play With Fire 3/2/12 . chapter 10
Interesting and good idea for a story, but the writing makes it confusing.
| Vivace.Assai 2/29/12 . chapter 12
First off, before we begin the review: oh, I don't think that you did something terribly horrible. It's understandable that you misunderstood. I tend to be rather long-winded with my writing, which leads to miscommunication... especially when corresponding on the Internet. But, the missing two profiles were interesting. As for the updating... well you're busy so it's understandable.
Now, onto the review!
Interesting chapter. The plot got pretty exciting really fast. I loved Fairen's and Fay's reactions to different events in this chapter. It was humorous and kind of quirky... especially Fairen's reaction in the very end of the chapter. I also like how you're slowly revealing each piece of the mystery (of what is happening) chapter by chapter instead of overloading us with information. It gives good development.
Thanks for the great read!
| Vivace.Assai 2/17/12 . chapter 11
Oh, I am so, SO (emphasis on the word "so" if you haven't guessed) sorry! I didn't mean to, but I guess I might have confused you... though the character profiles were definitely very interesting to read (and helped me sort out the characters better in my head), it wasn't exactly what I meant.
What I meant was that when you introduced Tsubasa to Missy in the last chapter, I was at first confused that it was him because he was only described as a "tall, lanky, and extremely cute boy" until Missy asked him if he was the one who kidnapped Fairen. I was just suggesting that you try to be more detailed when describing him so that readers could get a better idea of who he was - like highlight a striking quality about his appearance that will let readers guess who he is right off. But it was just a little suggestion that's more of a personal preference of mine.
However, thanks for actually trying to answer my confusion! That was a pretty nice gesture.
Best of luck with the next chapter!
| Vivace.Assai 2/16/12 . chapter 10
Interesting development. Missy is definitely interesting, but how old is she anyways? I feel like she's kind of mature, though I keep being under the impression that she's around David's age.
The addition of the sub-plot also makes this story pretty interesting.
As a note, though, I was at first pretty confused that Tsubasa (or at least, I think he's Tsubasa) was the one who was at the door, so I guess, you could work on character descriptions during the story to make it more understandable...
Beyond that, interesting read.
| Vivace.Assai 2/13/12 . chapter 9
You know, your writing is interesting because you really speed up your pace of reading as the story goes along. I was planning on reviewing each chapter, but I instead just got through all the chapters in a manner of minutes because my flow of reading was so quick.
Anyways, these last few chapters have been interesting. It is definitely pretty humorous, and I enjoyed the plot developments. I think Tsukasa is hilarious, while Tsubasa is also hilarious but just not as much. As for Fairen and Fay, they are two definite enjoyable characters.
Thanks for the great read. Can't wait to read more!
| Vivace.Assai 2/13/12 . chapter 4
Interesting. I would have liked it more if you actually showed Fay leaving the person with a bleeding blow to the head instead of actually have to explain that in the Author's Note at the beginning of the chapter. Beyond that, I loved the weird Monogram poem (that I, like Fay, didn't even bother trying to understand since it was just plain confusion and insensible), and Fay's character is definitely an interesting one.
| Vivace.Assai 2/13/12 . chapter 3
Okay... Now I'm definitely very curious. I mean, having Fay just spring out from out of the blue and having her with a mace... well... it's definitely curious... definitely curious indeed. I like how you've portrayed Fay so far, and I'm interested in seeing more of her.
As an added note: "onee-san"? It was kind of weird, but when that "onee-san" suddenly appeared, I felt as if I was reading a manga or watching an anime... Interesting mix of the Japanese language there.
| Vivace.Assai 2/13/12 . chapter 2
Interesting progression of the plot. I'm definitely interested in this story, just because I always love a dash of mystery and weird possible murders in the stories I read (especially when they're also fantasy and sci-fi related).
| Vivace.Assai 2/13/12 . chapter 1
Very interesting prologue... A bit too short for my tastes (mostly because it leaves me hanging and wondering what is exactly happening... and then if it wasn't for the fact that several chapters are already up, I would be musing over it for hours and thinking about it and... well, you get my point).
Continuing on, I like how you described everything. "Salty deliciousness of freshly flowing blood" is definitely a pretty nice description and really pops out.
I'm going to continue onto the next chapter!
| Parogar 1/2/12 . chapter 9
Tsukasa no namae ga kantan hanasuru da ka?
This chapter was alot of fun. I want a level 100 elephant!
I want a LEVEL TWO HUNDRED elephant!
I love fairen, best character lol
I live in the real world, and sometimes I think the mods have it out for me here too hahahahah
| Parogar 1/1/12 . chapter 8
Hahaha, this one WAS really funny. Man, those level 14 roosters don't joke around. They mean business.
lol using blood as paint. Nice one.
| Parogar 12/31/11 . chapter 7
You know, in the future PLEASE warn me if you're story is going to be this funny, I was drinking water when I read
"Username haha is already taken" and I almost drowned.
You could have killed me you know. Then YOU'D be the one that had to live with that :P
This story is really starting to hit its stride.