Just finished your story Chasing the Moon and excited to see where this one goes. I like Eli's character so far; independent, arrogant, controlling, dominant. Please don't turn him into a goofy sweety-pie! I've read too many stories that start out with a strong character, only to have that character turn to mushy idiot. Character develpment is a big deal to me. Develop the characters, don't change them.

You're a good writer. I can actually read without being distracted by incorrect usage or awkward wording. Work on keeping the story in the correct point of view, you tend to switch from first person to third person in the same sentence. I know it's easier for a lot of people to write in the first person because it's easier to get inside the character's head, but you can do the same thing in third person using internal dialogue. And since you have to do that with the other characters anyway, and the main character is the only one told in first person, it makes it obvious that that character is YOU. Consider writing in the first person, then changing to third. Or think in the first person, but write in third.

I like this really much, but i just will like that vera wasn't so coward

O.O Eli's trying to be nice! Update soon

This was cool! I liked it and I like Eli's uncertainty. :)

Vera is definitely not my favorite type of character, but she's great when interacting with Eli! I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

This is really interesting! I would love a bit more action with Eli and Vera! ;)

Cute. :)

I still don't like Vera very much. (Whoa that was weird to type.) She's not the type of character I like...

I do like this chapter, it was cool, even just as a filler!

I'm looking forward to future chapters.

YAY, i like Eli... in a strange creepy way

Update Soon!

Yay progress! You can do it Eli lol.

Wow! I loved your other one, following the moon is it? Might have got the name wrong... Anyway! I love this already! I have attached to Vera and wish that Eli could just use Coal's or Anthony's technique!

I liked it. can't wait for more!

Oh lord. Eli is an idiot! And I mean that in the nicest way possible haha. I can't wait to see how this develops. He must have some extremely redeeming qualities to get Vera to see past his shenanigans eventually. :)

Poor Vera! That is terrifying.

I think Eli is wooing her wrong xD loving it already. Cannot wait for more :)

Okay, so first off...great beginning! Really good start to a hopefully amazing story...update soon please:D

Yay! I'm really excited about this story. I think you do an excellent job of developing characters in Chasing The Moon (which I realized I haven't reviewed so I'm going to do a much better job of that with this story) and I'm interested to see you do it with someone as dark as Eli.

I also like that your stories are a good mix of romance and action. I can't wait to see where you take this!