this was very well done, a little rough around the edges- what can you expect from an eighth grader with so little writing experience ! but the meat and potatoes were there! you should definitely revise and lengthen it as you said, it would be lovely to read the full thing someday!

I like it. Amazingly terrific :) I will say I can see where it would be better :)

Really good! The revolutionary era is my favorite!