Well-set, and horribly detailed. Definitely a well-written text... even if I'm not quite used to reading horror atm. This flows smoothly, and shows a unique take on vampiric characters. If 'liking' is any word for horror genre, I like this! Keep it up!

First off, I'd like to compliment you on the creative and interesting presentation of vampiric characters here. You fleshed out your characters really well by making them archetypal rather than naming them. The scene was sett well, and the descriptions were beautifully detailed. Nice work.