|Reviews for I Never|
| seredemia 2/22/13 . chapter 48
OH MY GOD. IT'S OVER. NO.
AND THE BIT WITH IAN AND ESMERELDA SAYING THEY WEREN'T MARRIED YET. OH MY GOD. THAT GOT ME SAYING "AAW" OUT LOUD. THAT IS SO BLOODY CUTE. I CAN DEFINITELY SEE THEM BEING MARRIED AND MAYBE HAVING SOME MOVIE THEMED WEDDING - AND OMG THAT WOULD BE SO SO SO CUTE.
AND I'M SO HAPPY THAT JAMIE AND KIM ARE TOGETHER TOO.
AND PETE HAS COMPLETELY MOVED ON FROM DANNY. I LOVE THAT.
IT'S JUST REALLY NICE TO SEE EVERYONE BEING HAPPY.
I have really enjoyed reading this story! I'm so sorry it took me so long to catch up, but I'm glad I did it now! This was a lovely story to read and I thank you for writing it. Your characters all have developed so much and they deserve the happiness they got. I'll be looking forward to whatever story you decide to write next!
| seredemia 2/22/13 . chapter 47
Short chapter and this was such a contrast to the last chapter. I like the significance of it though. With everyone else, their story is just kind of starting, but Ben's ends here. I think that's so bittersweet and clever, so this was a great time to post this chapter. I really love how you time your chapters with real life events. That's one of the charms of your stories, and you plan them so well. I love it.
| seredemia 2/22/13 . chapter 46
OH MY GOD. THERE'S SO MUCH HAPPINESS IN THIS CHAPTER. I THINK I MIGHT GET EMOTIONAL. BUT BUT BUT ELIZABETH FOUND ALAN AND YAY! FINALLY. I KNEW SHE WOULD FIND HIM IN THE END! AND ALAN AND MARIANNE. THAT WAS HEARTBREAKINGLY NICE. AND PETE AND BOB ARE HAPPY. AND VICTOR AND ZOE ARE BACK TOGETHER. AND I LOVE HOW YOU WROTE LAUREN'S SCENE. IT'S NICE THAT SHE'S STAYING FRIENDS WITH SIMON, BUT EVEN THOUGH SHE STARTED CRYING, SHE SMILES AS WELL, WHICH MEANS SHE'S ACCEPTING IT AND THANK GOD FOR THAT. IT'S A NEW START FOR HER. AND HELL YES KIM TEXTED JAMIE AND IT'S A NEW START FOR THEM AS WELL.
I LOVE HOW YOU ENDED THEIR STORIES ON NEW YEARS DAY. THAT'S SO CLEVER. IT'S LIKE THE END IS JUST THE BEGINNING, YEAH? THAT'S CLEVER, I COMMEND YOU FOR THAT WHICH IS WHY I'M TYPING IN CAPS LOCK. THIS WAS A REALLY REALLY GREAT WAY TO JUST WRAP THE STORY UP. KUDOS TO YOU. THIS WAS A LOVELY CHAPTER.
| seredemia 2/22/13 . chapter 45
SDFKJNSKGBDK EVERYONE'S IS GETTING TOGETHER. THIS IS MAKING ME SO HAPPY. WHY DIDN'T I READ THIS SOONER. AAW. IAN AND ESMERELDA. THAT WAS BLOODY CUTE. I LOVE THEM. IT'S SO CUTE THAT HE WAS ABLE TO CHEER HER UP IN HER MOMENT OF DEPRESSION. LIKE SHE WAS ALL SAD AT THE START OF THIS CHAPTER, BUT BY THE END, EVERYTHING WAS RAINBOWS AND SUNSHINE FOR HER. AND SHE BLURTED OUT THAT SHE LOVED HIM! CUTE! AND HIS REACTION! EVEN MORE CUTER! AND I'M LAUGHING TOO BECAUSE THE MOVIE DID SOME BACKGROUND MUSIC FOR THEM. HAHAHAHA. WHAT A PERFECT MOMENT TO CONFESS HER LOVE. IMAGINE IF THEY DECIDED TO WATCH A HORROR MOVIE AND THIS HAPPENED - OH MY GOD HAHAHA. BUT YEAH, I REALLY LIKED THIS CHAPTER. IT'S ABOUT TIME THAT EVERYONE IS GETTING TOGETHER.
| seredemia 2/22/13 . chapter 44
YAY. THEY FINALLY SPOKE. Although I did think it was really... quick of Kim to ask for Jamie's number. But I suppose she's just a very confident girl. Nevertheless YAY! I've been waiting for this moment! I thought Jamie's response with ""I've got to buy ingredients, and that's at the final stop, so I can fall asleep if I want." was very cute and awkward. It's really nice that Jamie's really eager to get to know her. It means he really likes her. Jamie's really realistic as a character because you describe his eagerness and feelings really well, and yet he's still so innocent and in character. I hope he and Kim do end up together; I can see it coming. They'll text each other every day and talk in the bus and get married on top of a bus and live together and have eleven children.
| seredemia 2/22/13 . chapter 43
Aaw, what a sweet chapter. This is the disadvantage with not reading this story for a while. I was slightly surprised when Bob confessed to Pete that he liked him back. But it was a nice surprise. It's nice to see Pete being happy now. And I like how Bob gathered the courage to admit that. I mean, it's hard enough admitting to the person you like that you like them, but also to admit your sexuality is a WHOLE new level. That definitely shows massive development in his character. It's nice to see that he's not being judgmental towards bisexuals anymore. It's a nice contrast between the Bob from the earlier chapters where he pushed Pete away because of his sexuality. The ending is cute too!
| seredemia 2/22/13 . chapter 42
I. WILL. FINISH. THIS. STORY. ONE. DAY.
Lucky that Oliver randomly called him to remind him of the party... I'm guessing that the next chapter might focus on the party then and something might happen? Maybe Bus Girl is invited too and Jamie gets drunk and jumps on her or something. I don't know.
Nice to see Elizabeth getting closer and closer to finding her brother. I really do think she might find him in the end now. They've had so many drawbacks and twists that she just deserves to find him now and it would be rather cruel of you to deny her of that in the end...
| Whirlymerle 1/21/13 . chapter 10
In the second section, you start with what seems to be Lauren's POV: "Simon seemed to be doing fine, or at least, he replied like that." But then midway through, you change to Simon's POV. In such a short scene, the POV switch felt a little disjointed.
[she drunk her lemonade shortly after] past tense of drink is "drank"
[So… there we sit, then…there we're sitting] I think both "there" would sound better as "here," since Lauren and Simon are talking about themselves, here.
I don't know how I feel about Lauren and Simon getting together… I feel like it's never good for couples that constantly break up to get back together again. Well, we'll see what happens with them.
Ah, jetlag. I hate it. I think you depict their grumpiness really well. I hope they find Alan too. :)
And happy late/early birthday! I looked at the dates of the reviews for this chapter, so I think your birthday is in two months? Let's hope I can leave you a birthday review. ;)
| Vernelley 1/12/13 . chapter 48
Oh wow it's finished Q_Q
It's neat how you ended it the same way you started it, though I think that's to be expected. But I like how the characters they met in the course of the story also played this time. It's a really nice touch.
Interesting how Jamie and Kim turned out as a couple. Kind of amusing how they're as bad as (or worse than) the Victor/Zoe couple XD
Harhar but Pete what if Daniel just wants to hang out as friends? XD Although it's great that Pete and Bob have a nice ending together, it *could* be read another way. I'm probably thinking this because we don't know what Daniel's mindset is; whether he wants to get back with Pete or he really just wants to hang out. I mean it's kind of implied that Daniel might want to be back in a relationship but we don't know if that's really the case or not. Like "ignore anyone you used to be involved with now that you're in another relationship, even if they might only want to hang around as friends or something." (I'm sure that's not what you meant at all, but you know. I said 'could' XD) Besides, who's to say their relationship won't end the same way Pete's last one did... Probably one reason the story should end here... /steamrolled
Don't really have the time to nitpick at the moment but I just want to point out a couple of things that struck me as kind of odd.
[Once they were done recapping, Alan Johnson asked the question he'd been having for a while.]
-'Recapping' is not a word I'd advise using in the narration of a story; it's pretty colloquial and it's kind of like author-speak so it can border on Breaking the Fourth Wall. (If you get what I mean. I hope I'm referencing that trope correctly \o/)
[Also, he shared a first name with the guy who I was originally going to hook up with.]
-I would say 'hook up' is a fairly recent colloquialism, so it seems a bit strange to hear it from any of the older characters in this story.
Anyway, this was a great story and I enjoyed following it. :)
| PurpleWings71 1/11/13 . chapter 48
| Whirlymerle 1/9/13 . chapter 9
Hey there! Alas, you are so far ahead in your writing, and I'm so far behind in my reading. :(
[find everything was good, his parents were happily ignoring each other and the dog would be greeting him wildly, as usual.] I can't recall the specific grammar rule, but this read a little awkwardly. I suggest getting rid of the "was, were, and would be" (recommended) or add a "that" after find.
[Hey, mrs. Tyler] capitalize Mrs.
["That's… probably a lie," Jamie replied.] Great line on Jamie's part—probably one of my favorite moments of the chapter. True that.
Oh man, I can't say I like Victor's dad very much, especially after Victor says he knows he's dad is being manipulative but pretends to not be… that's sort of demeaning Victor's intelligence, I think. But I can totally understand where he's coming from. Especially since his daughter has decided to live with her mother, it's no wonder he's trying really hard to get Victor to stay with them.
It makes me kinda sad to see Victor's mom call Forks "your father's animal," but frankly, I'm surprised that she's walking her at all, if she's not a dog person. So I guess I appreciate her character's sense of responsibility.
I'm sure divorce is super hard on kids, but I also agree with Jamie that people with divorced parents can be lucky too. In fact, I feel like, through your fight scene, it's almost good that Victor's parents are getting a divorce because two unhappy spouses living together can be more traumatic on the kids, I think.
| Vernelley 1/4/13 . chapter 47
I thought it was pretty interesting to bring the focus back to Ben. But then I suppose it's sort of like the 'ultimate' resolution out of all the plotlines since he's been alive with the circumstances haunting him for so long. So I kind of liked this, because it's a bittersweet kind of ending.
Again, not much time to nitpick, but I didn't really notice anything glaring anyway. Looking forward to the epilogue!
| Vernelley 1/4/13 . chapter 46
Ahaha I keep forgetting to review \o/
Honestly I don't really think Elizabeth or Alan would have had any adverse reaction to Bob and Pete getting together, since they both seem quite accepting of that sort of thing.
I wouldn't say it's a bad thing exactly, but considering Elizabeth has been looking for her brother for so long, you could probably elaborate more on their reunion, since the actual moment of meeting after so long is very short.
Anyway, I'm really glad everything's improving. Especially Jake, I'm glad he's getting better /o/
Too tired to nitpick but maybe you want to look around to insert missing apostrophes because I saw a few cases of those.
So I wonder what's left after the next chapter, if it's not over just yet...
| Septarizky 1/3/13 . chapter 42
Oh my God! You're always suprising me with your twists, dear! I really love your writing; it's just so freaking good. I'm speechless.
Instant-favourite for you! :)
| XxCliche-SpicexX 12/31/12 . chapter 1
Whaoh. That's a lot of characters! I'm all confused :s