I like it!

It's great so far! Though the title is spelled wrong.

This is funny and cute! Please update soon!

I WANT SOME ONE TO FU*K .

This story is quite amusing i can't wait for the next chapter lol well until then.

Turquoise

This was great! So excited for the next chapter, so lets hope its out soon

Back to my critiquing (haha)- The parts between A/N's is a little confusing, like the same font as the story and no breaks gives it a thing when you're (me personally) like; Why are the characters saying... OHH! haha. And the beginning was like; Wait... wait a- oh... dream again! lol. I personally still loved this chapter, so quickly work on your next one (I seriously feel like I have no room to talk since I dont even have my story up... yet... *mischievous smile*)

To wrap this up, it was a great chapter and Im looking forward to the next chapter... update quickly or no cookie. :D

Peace, Love, and Joy,

Snow Whites Poison Kiss

i like that you switch povs .

i thought for sure luna was gonna be a bitch :)

First reaction;

Marilyn Manson! I fucking love you! And Marilyn Manson, bring on the Manson! Now I must go listen to some songs! And if you're wondering (you're not but I'll tell you anyway); I do fall asleep to Marilyn Manson, Alesana, Get Scared, Snow Whites Poison Bite (take what you will from the exact relation of my username and that. Again, I wanted the Kiss at the end, but I have created another account on here, and have decided to not use it with that username)and all that juicy stuff

Secondly;

I quite enjoyed this short chapter (oddly... again, shorts arent my thing. Mostly because I can read shorts in three minuets :d)

Seeing as I have reviewed on every chapter in the past... 10-20 minuets, I have nothing really to say except the same boring shit i reviewed last time, so I shall threaten! If you know of Kuroshitsuji (Black Butler) then this threat will mean all the more to you;

If you do not update soon, I will not give you a Sebastian flavored cupcake!

Meaning, update soon... PLEASE! And hopefully my advice will be taken

Peace, Love, and Joy,

Snow Whites Poison Bite

You have surprisded me! It was a dream after all! Haha... wow...

I really liked the chapter this time round, but... it moved a little too fast. Heres some advice Snow Whites Poison Kiss (whoops. Snow Whites Poison Kiss is my username on FF... *sighs* i dont feel like changing it) style (you may take it or not, i am here for friendly criticism :D);

Maybe, if you lengthened the stories, and moved it at a slower pace, it would make it an easier read, and this goes for any of your stories too. If you slowed things down, developed more of a relationship between characters, and used a little bit more descriptions, it would make your writing increase so much. Ones with tastes for faster paced stories would be more suited for this, as I am not, but I will continue to read your story, and fully support it with my constructive criticism, and advice And I just realized my last review contained my FF name *sighs* typing habits, what can you do?

Peace, Love, and Joy,

Snow Whites Poison BITE

Theeerrree we gooo haha

I like it. Correction; I LOVE it. See what I did there? I got you didnt I? Haha

Anyways, yeah there were a few mistakes, but I am not going to delve into that, just agreeing with another review, since I know I get mistakes too, and its kind of hard NOT to miss them lol

I am about to go read the next chapter, so i am in kind of a rush, but I shall review the next one in like... ten minuets, because if I like a story, I review every chapter

Other than that, I love the idea of it so far, but I was kind of hoping you could introduce Shimenji first before having him come in a kiss Gideon out of nowhere, and in front of Luna lol. You know, all that developing the relationship shit haha. Over all, I liked the first chapter, and expect an equally great chapter. Dont worry, this isnt coming from someone who doesnt know what their talking about. I have stories on Fanfiction, just not on here... yet

Sorry for this long ass review *worried look* its my inner fanfiction

Peace, Love, and Joy,

Snow Whites Poison KIss

Awww I want to read more! XD

i feel like your kind of rushing the story -.- i would like it more if it was like timid love or leading up to it, its still good though .

Awesome, been waiting for this chapter for months!

I think- IT'S AWSOMEEEEEEEEEE u really need 2 update . I surprised how good this turned out Im very interested to see how far shim and gids relationship will go :D

OMG you can't stop there, I have to know what happens next. Please update!