AW! I can't believe he would try to do that! Why?

I like this a lot so far!

I read the first one and really enjoyed it, but I like this one more so far. It's interesting to see how everything has developed or been tweaked a bit.

I think it says a lot about Violet that the discovery of the existence of Dreams and Nightmares doesn't count as a "life-altering surprise".

But dude! What an asshole! God, please tell me she doesn't let him get away with that. Like, that should not be let slide. If it needs to be momentarily put on the back burner, fine. But there should be punishment. Retribution. Pain. Gah! He needs to be punished! Seriously, I can't believe he just did that. I mean, I can - because that's just the kind of rage invoking betrayal that makes a good story - you know, in which the Reader actually feels rage invoking betrayal - but still. I can't believe he just did that! Asshole. I will be thoroughly disappointed if she does not make him bleed. Like, sucks for him that he pulled that stunt and she Didn't die, because now it's all like 'Bitch, I own you!'

Sorry. I'm just very upset with him right now. I had been wondering why you were doing it this way, having Alexander in on the soul binding idea, giving him the wish, all that. And I kinda get where he was coming from, not wanting her to follow but already breaking the rules by allowing/granting her awareness. Still though, totally selfish, ungrateful tool move.

Aaaanyway, on another note. I can't help but notice your change from past tense to present tense between versions of this story, and wonder if this is just because you've discovered an affinity for present tense, or if it is a clue to the direction you are going to take the plot...

I'm so epically happy you're writing this again. Even though I only actually discovered the original this summer, so there was no especially long wait like your original loyal followers endured. I was super sad when I finished it to realize there was no sequel, so I have been seriously looking forward to this. I love your imagination. I love what you did with it. It reminds me of that quote:

"By believing passionately in something that still does not exist, we create it. The nonexistent is whatever we have not sufficiently desired."

- Franz Kafka

Ah! Just the idea of reading this gets me all happily aflutter. I'm a freak. Anyway, can't wait to read more.

Yours,

Dakota S.

PS She's been around for 17 years. Why have they never painted together before? Tut-tut...

Whoa.

At first, I was like, I don't really like this version of how Alexander gets back... But I have to say, I really got into it by the end. Pretty awesome. Therefore, you must update as soon as possible... Please? :)

Excellent beginning. It feels quite a bit different from the old draft. In a good way though! Many more details. I was worried you were going to take out the Candyland scene because I do love that part ever so much! And there it was! I'm glad you're rewriting this with some new twists. The story was amazing the first time, but I don't like rereading stories most of the time. Well, keep up the amazing writing!

WOW! I didn't see that one coming, Alexander betraying her but it turns out he has to PROTECT her. This is my first time reading you story, and its very intriguing and original. I really like it and shows GREAT promise. I cant wait for the next chapter.

Oh my God, what was he trying to do to her? I really enjoyed this chapter and can't wait to see how things now go on for Victoria in the nightmare kingdom.

I really enjoyed the original, and I'm really glad you decided to rewrite. There seems to be a lot more character development, and I'm excited to see where it goes, especially since you mentioned you're going in a whole new direction. Keep it up! :)

Your back! Yay!

I'm glad you are doing a rewrite on this story. I haven't been on fiction press in a long time and do not remember the exact story well enough to recgonize differnces between the two of them. I do know that it was one of my favorites and that I am excited to read it again.

I am filled with so much joy that you are revising this story. I greatly enjoyed the original, and feel I'll enjoy this version even more. :D

I remember reading the first version of this, but sadly (but typically in my case), I've forgotten most of the story! Although, I do remember that I really enjoyed it! I thought to myself,

"Weeeelll, I don't recall the story line... and there's supposed to be a change in it, so what better time to re-read it than now?" And I must say, you've done a great job of it so far! I'm really looking forward to the rest of the story _

Yay, another chapter up! It really is like reading a different story, but at the same time it's the same...(that doesn't make sense). I love how you kept Alexander's three "Looks". :3 I'm looking forward to see the major plot change. I still love Violet as always...makes me want to read gothic lit.

-Sunshine.

I really love the re write! It's completely different even though it's the same story, and so it's still interesting to read. I'm finding myself looking forward to the next chapter to find out what happens... even though I know what happens. I think this version is a lot more mature than the last, though I still couldn't pick a favourite. Looking forward to the next chapter

I am so happy you've decided to edit and re-write this wonderful story of yours! I read your original version what seems like years ago and have always loved your, Violet's, character. I would, however, say that at times she seems too much like any socialy awkward/brilliant heroine. I do wish I could know more about her upbringing and her family life. How has it affected her to the point that she is the way she is? One example is the acquisition of the family's home. Is it important because her father can't afford a home like this because he is, I'm assuming, a struggling artist? Or is it important for another reason? My point is that it seems too vauge and disconnected to bring up details that could, in fact, have very little to do with the story or characters.

This being said, I'm very, very excited to see your progress with The Nightmare King and give you my support!