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| Reviews for AllStars |
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   fightergirl1425 3/30/12 . chapter 4Good, a longer chapter. This chapter is very satisfying, so you ought to update soon! |
| GoldtheMan 2/29/12 . chapter 2 hahahahaha ray is so old |
| GoldtheMan 2/13/12 . chapter 1 Wooow, this is so...wooow. Everything is so perfect. I literally can't look away from the screen while reading. |
| 9gagperson 2/13/12 . chapter 1 hehey dude, i'm back man. glad you updated, it's getting much more excited. update tomorrow! |
| Black Maya 2/13/12 . chapter 1 I reviewed anyway. HAHA “There were earthquakes that lasted for two hours, tsunamis that were more than twelve meters high, storms and hurricanes that devoured the land into a sea of destruction and abyss.” Wow! Lasted for two hours? More than 12 meters high? “into the sea of the abyss” I love the calamity! :) This marked the start of the Galactic Era (G.E.). I like the way you said this line. Super short. Simple. Yet marking. 3 I like the idea of the hybrids too. The idea of the 14 elements intrigues me as well. War of Orion: War of Rising Dawn? :D Did you know that Orion is (Latin/Italian) for Rising Dawn? XD ‘Lotus Elemental Alliance Federation’ I like this. The way you write the preface really grabbed my attention from the start. It’s like I was hearing the words myself. But it’s too much like a history book. But I like it. Unique and wonderful! Keep on writing, Black Maya |
| fightergirl1425 2/13/12 . chapter 3 You lack adjectives. Some of your sentences are too short. I suggest you lengthen them to give more meaning to the sentence. Other than that, everything is good. Your plot is interesting, however, I still do not see much progress. I am looking forward to the next chapters. Update as soon as you can. |
| Someone you might not know 2/13/12 . chapter 3 UPDATE UNTIL THE RECENT ONE YOU HAVE WRITTEN ALREADY. I'M DYING TO KNOW MORE! (Don't get distracted by Vocaloid please T_T) |
| i'm anonymous 2/13/12 . chapter 3 i don't like the way that claire fell in love with an oldie (for her age, that is) that's how many year's gap? 6? ewww! still, Ray's soooooo hoooooot! |
| Goodness ME 1/31/12 . chapter 1 DUDE! can't believe you really posted it! so far i'm still lovin' it! hope u can post more chapters soon!:D |
| fightergirl1425 1/30/12 . chapter 1 so deep and interesting. now, do me a favor and update this asap |
| 9gagperson 1/30/12 . chapter 2 Yes! I love this story, dude. update soon |
| anonymous 1/12/12 . chapter 2 nice story but i think there's a lot of characters |
