Saw the last paragraph and i nearly fell out of my seat... great job buddy, keep it going.

Now we're getting busy! Good job. Only 1 spelling mistake, but i wont bother you about it. We're making some major progress here, and Jake seems to be getting the hang of using his physical abilities and firepower as a mix. Keep on going, and i await to see more. Again, good job.

Uhh... wow that was in depth... amazing back story. This is the first time you ever described what really went on when Charlie was captured. The government hiring this guy? that issue is still a little iffy in my head, but everything else is great. 1 spelling mistake... or at least i think it was a mistake, nothing major but at the beginning you said That's why he's able to take the way you heard at such a young age. i think you meant talk... unless you really meant take which also makes my thinking iffy. but dont let my inner critic get you down, this was amazing and i look forward to seeing more! Incoryable, vraiment incroyable! Amazing, truly amazing!

Bravado Sir! The plot thickens. Its about time you got out with another chapter, and let me tell you, this isn't half bad. We finally get a back story on Gabriel, although, not a really long one, and now Jake and Charlie know what they need to do. They just need to figure out how to do it. Great Job all around, and keep up the good work. Looking forward to more!

Unique premise. Hope you continue soon.

Until then,

Keep Writing!

I can't see a single problem with this story.
Good work with this story

Good chapter. You have walked me into a situation that requires solving. I am interested.

Congratulations. This is the first story I have ever followed on fictionpress. This is a pretty good story, and I am looking forward to reading more.

This is as much as I could read in one night. I really like this story. I like the concept and the protectiveness of Jake. I would reccomend that you write slightly longer chapters though. All in all a pretty good story, keep it up.

This is a really good story and I enjoyed reading it because of how well written it is. I love how protective Jake is but I also liked that it was a good fight scene.

This was by far the most intense action scene I have read in a long time. It kept me on the edge of my seat the whole time. Who was that mysterious figure called gabriel? (I may have spelled that wrong) and why does charlie know him, but the most important question that I want to know is, what made gabriel leave. I cannot WAIT for the next chapter. Good job

Epic, i can tell that something epic is about to happen

Okay, well I think you have a good idea but your execution isn't great. You really need to add more descriptions. I'm finding it hard to connect to the characters because I have no idea who they are really, or anything useful about them. If you add more descriptors, and maybe give some better background information, I think it will be a lot better.

Hay it’s me (Tai Claw) again

So you wrote chapter 15, I’ve read it and I thought that it was a good “in-between” chapter (meaning that it opens up doors for much more) I hope you keep up the good work and upload a new chapter soon -

P.S.

I tried to do that firepower test and I could not do it. (

GAAAAHHHHHHH I LOVE IT! I haven't read anything this good in *ages* and this is so cool! I found this because you reviewed another story (The Master Hacker) and I love it!

Please update!

I will spontaneously combust from the sheer awesomeness!

UPDATE MORE!

My *only* suggestion is:

1. Add some female characters to the story! I realize it might not work with your plot, but (being a girl myself) I would like it if there were one or two girls in the story.