Well, First thing's first, I didn't try to make her seem "bratty" or "childish," she was mad that someone who didn't have a good costume won when there were plenty of other girls. I probably should've explained also that Christina is popular and how Tara thinks that is why, which is my bad. Second of all, you know how the time paused at Tara's party in the beginning and things were on fire? That is the fire world, which is basically a fire version of where you are, except time is stopped. I should've explained that too, my bad. Thanks for the review!

Oops, forgot something. What did you mean by "Fire World" in chapter 6, that place she teleported to to change? Where and what is it?

The chapter was great until the main character eploded in front of everyone about not winning the contest. I know she's the original Hot Masquerade, but it made her seem childish and bratty and that would make people think badly of here. I figured she was even only doing it to impress Brent, but she couldn't let him know she was the real Hot Masquerade either, so the reason could only be selfish pride. But hey, maybe that's supposed to be part of her character.

Lol! Interesting and a bit funny! I like it

That's so cool! Keep on posting it please!

Wow..that's really interesting! Keep it up!

this is pretty good, i like it

It's OK, but you've described the fire as if it was something Tara expected, so you might to work on that.

Great action, but that part with her explaining herself to people and getting interrupted confused me. I couldn't tell when it was her talking or soembody else. Other than that, awesome job.

Thanks, i appreciate the support, and i will review your story and make suggestions 3

Even better than the first! The first peragrph explains so many things normal authors would take whole books explaining. I think I could learn a lot about writing from you. Still, now I'm kind of wondering why she has these powers and can do all that stuff. I mean, thos powers are ridiculous, in the good way, so there has to be a reason for them. It feels like something that should have explained in this chapter. But I'm sure you'll explain it soon.

PS, if you didn't see my other review, would you please review my story, Firepower? I haven't had any reviews yet and I really want to knwo what people think.

That. Was. Amazing! Some people might not think so highly of such a short chapter, but I've never seen anyone stuff such good action into such short amount of words. In all honesty, that was the best hook I've ever read. You should have no trouble writing a query if you ever want to publish this. I'm going to read the next chapter right now. Wow, awesome job, really.

Say, would you please review my story, Firepower? I really want to know what people think, but I haven't even had one review yet.