I loved the apparent anger in thIs piece.

Therapeutic poetry always turns out amazing;

I'd say my favorite bit was the angel wings section.

A prime example of saying something so profound in a very profound way. Excellent work, Anna!

"...I'm refusing to take a sip of your bombastic drink..." What a neat put-down, with just the right note of scorn. This is a very powerful, poetic affirmation of life in spite of its drawbacks.

Hey! As always brilliant work. ''I believe we should not be afraid of departure'' absolutely true. ''because you think that what has worth is physically touching the stars'' - sometimes people have difficulty grasping what they cannot see, feel, or touch. Which is why faith / trust is always broken. Anyways, I thought you did a really good job writing this. Keep it Up!

Like these lines a lot:

living like a delicate flower doomed to

shrivel up at the first breath of winter frost

or existing like a keg of dynamite always anxious of matches - All very great images.

"my cosmic lattee" - very nice.

Overall:

I really love it. It works as a great short story as well. I will say that it sounds like a conflict also of beliefs without being the main cause of why they are leaving.

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If you have time, could you review my story:

s/2988494/1/The_First_Vampire

I know it says 9 chapters but because I couldn't figure out how to do a line break... I ended up breaking the sections into 'chapters' so it's not even that long. I believe one chapter was 2 paragraphs :P

Thanks ahead of time.

Powerful message.