I like this story, especially the idea behind this.

But you have some mistakes in the tense as in:

"...if someone was trying to tear it apart. The ground cracks before Paul's..."

You switch from past to present; you have that a few times, but you can easily fix that. )

Oh, and I love the part where the demon says, "Would you like a brain, Scarecrow?" XD

And, last but not least, I like the ending. o-o

Good job. -