i absolutely adored this story! i just read it all in one go. they're such a great bunch of characters and orlenth and rysem are just wonderful :)

Really enjoyed this, thanks for sharing :)

Gosh. You sure know how to write two stubborn and argumentative people. But, all was well in the end and I appreciate that.I am also very glad neither took a that would have been horrible to read.

No sex. but the ending was cute I guess :)

This story was absolutely amazing! I applaud you.

Lovely!

Haha, poor Rysem is totally in over his head, isn't he? And that sure sounded like a fun, relaxing honeymoon, I'll say.

Well, this is quite interesting so far. I already love both Orlenth and Rysem and I think they're going to have one hell of a relationship.

I do feel like I'm missing some background, probably from Twin Lives Twisted (which I started reading but never finished, and I forgot most of what happened, haha), but it's not enough to keep me from enjoying the story and this chapter definitely helped fill in some holes. I love that you're tackling class and political issues as well as the romance; it gives the characters' relationship more weight, if that makes sense. there's more to them than just two guys who dislike each other but then eventually fall in love (as I assume will happen, lol).

This was a really light, clean story. I enjoyed watching their relationship change slowly as they learned more about each other.

I enjoyed this a lot, nice story and interesting characters.

Um... I don't have much to say, mostly because it's almost 4 in the morning and I'm not exactly coherent at the moment. And for that I blame you. I enjoyed this. It was nicely pacedand... I really need to sleep.

Great job, I might be back with more tomorrow morning, if I think of anything.

Kiyoshi'sGirl64 and Kiyosh

Wow. That was absolutely beautiful. It was probably the best thing I have ever read on this website. It was perfectly paced and the writing quality was fantastic. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future!

Even when they're together they still the same with each other. Kinda wanted to see a bit more of the romance, nothing naughty or anything, but the entire story lead up to one this moment and it was about ten sentences of cuteness then back to normal basically.

Probably took me so look to review this because I didn't want it to be over. If you're saving that other epilogue for a spin off I'm in!

I don't really like writing critism because I don't want to hurt people. Now, I will because you ask for it and I already have let review that expressed how I like your story...

For me a good story have three things: Good plot, interessing characters, and nice writing style.

Your plot is interressing. In a way, it is original. You wrote, imagined your own world. But, in a other way, it's cliche. People who dislike each other and have to wed, it's a story we see often. It's not that I dislike cliche but sometime I feel like it's a easy way... Because cliche exist for a reason they make good story :) In this story, the end it's for me too much a cliche... Divorce paper? I find it easy. I think you could write something more original there. In fact, it didn't seem logical for me... Why Rysem or Orlenth didn't think of that earlier? In fact, I found your end a bite rush...

I like your characters,there belivable. I think there that your weak point it's description. I know what Rysem or Orlenth think but I don't know their physical appearance. Did, Rysem or Orlenth have tics. Also, sometimes when we are in a chapter where it's Rysem point of view, it's not that clear that we are in his head.I read sentence that I think are in Orlenth point of view. Like this: Orlenth let go of Rysem completely and scrubbed at his face with his hands. "It's just…I…I don't know why." For a moment, Orlenth's lost expression made him look younger than his twenty-four years, but he gathered himself quickly.

Maybe, it's more easier for you to be in Orlenth head.

For your writing style, I don't many things to said. I found some typos but you write really fast and that is kind of understandable. I think your story need more description, "physical" description.

Yay! Love it : )

Beautifully done. Now I just wish there were more chapters so we could see the fruits of their relationship fully bloom : )