That was really good. Got some creep going on that I like :D
-Anna

Cute for ur first poem.

It is not a failure; it is, quite basic as a piece of art. Similar to the reviewer above, words are very open and therefore need depth and potential to have metaphoric or even metaphysical meanings. You should equally consider using more complex punctuation to help structure your poem.

I wouldn't say this poem was a fail at all! Very good, considering it was your first attempt. I really like the title of this piece, makes it already appear to be an exciting piece. You really get your point across with the language that you choose. I also like your choice of words, like "spectrum." My only suggestion is that in poetry, words are a lot more open to us. You could trying using a simile or a metaphor as you write this piece. It read a lot like prose, which is fine if you're writing prose. But if you have the benefit of calling it a poem, make use of some of the fun, literary things you can do with pieces like this! Keep up the awesome work. :]