|Reviews for Betrayal by Blood|
| Milo.Tsubame 10/18/12 . chapter 3
Wow, I am honestly very impressed with your writing style - natural, but not informal, and detailed with little phrases here and there without overloading the work with extensive description. You probably don't remember me, but I was lured in by your other work, "Wherefore art thou Juliet" and stumbled across this tale. As I'm an avid fan of fantasy works, "Betrayal by Blood" really caught my attention.
Firstly, I'd like to honour you for the fact that your words on betrayal are absolutely amazing. I'm glad you enjoy writing what you call "ominous stuff", because I certainly enjoy reading them! The POV switches keep the story interesting, and I love how the two perspectives are beginning to join together. Of course, I can't wait till they meet! As for the "confusing factor", one could read each section by itself and still enjoy the plot fully as if reading two books at once! Though I usually dislike sudden jumps and cut-offs, you're the exception because everything you write in between the line breaks flow so smoothly.
By the way, your romance plots always seem to inspire that warm feeling inside. I can't write romance (aside from comedic, joke pairings) to save my life.
Ah, hopefully I haven't spammed you with this mini wall of text. I'll be looking forward to your updates!
| Nyla Susset 6/8/12 . chapter 11
Nooooooo... these are terrible news... I was very excited with the story and was really looking forward to reading the next chapter and getting to the end... I really wanna know what will happen to Ava and Ryuu... please continue the story soon... I'll be waiting for it!
| Nyla Susset 6/8/12 . chapter 10
Wow! From all the chapters so far, this is definitely my favorite )
Call me corny but I liked a lot the love stuff )
| Nyla Susset 6/8/12 . chapter 9
No way! He kissed her... omgosh... he kissed her... I cannot believe it...awwwww... 3
I love the story... I cannot stop reading... hehe... )
| Nyla Susset 6/7/12 . chapter 2
I just started reading and I really like it... really good story so far!
Well... I'll kepp reading! )
| FantaCLuvr 4/25/12 . chapter 11
| Elven.Roses 4/16/12 . chapter 11
This is a wonderful story, I simply could not stop reading it! I enjoyed your wit and style of writing, it gives the story a special sort of charm. I hope to read more, but I feel as if the romance in the last chapter was a bit rushed. Mayne it fits in with your storyline, but that's just my personal opinion.
| DeathlyAngels 4/15/12 . chapter 1
Great story! Was Elizabeth the person that said I'll never betray you? I was so scared for Avy! Good job on making me feel intense! Is the italize words memory? Please confirm! Overall good job!
| AranaBanana 4/1/12 . chapter 10
It's rather great to read the chapters one day only to have another posted the day after. Good timing I must say. But then, I don't really have much to comment. So I'll just stick to saying that this chapter was nicely written. I also quite like the name Kione.
| AranaBanana 3/31/12 . chapter 9
I've found this story very interesting so far. And I just love the bits of insight scattered throughout. They ring so true.
Other than that, I like the plot and I'll be waiting for the next chapters. Keep up the good work!
| Inspector Goole 3/30/12 . chapter 9
Well RebelMaru, I review again. I may be somewhat short of inspiration as my new profession is apparently to watch potatoes cook and rush to their aid should they boild over. Yes, I know, I deserve the corona graminea. Anyway, I feel rather privelidged at, well, the special privelidges you have allowed for me to have, though somewhat lacking in chocolate, but that is obviously completely unrelated. It was another stunning chapter from a strong fiction that keeps up with my undoubtably high expectations. Now, to answer your questions in my, ahem, unique manner: about doing a sequel to this or focussing on your other fic, I say why not both? I accept entirely that updates may come as regularly as CITV continues programmes after 6pm, but why abandon a fic with so much potential or neglect the development of something that could well become the next Harry Potter? I may not be one of your avid followers who are desperate for the very tiniest hint of romance, but I am impressed you managed to hold it off for a whole nine chapters. As more praise, you have definitely not lost your touch for adding in completely unforseeable plot twists. I had honestly not expected Goodwin to die, at least not this early on, but I think he died in a rather original and brutally realistic way, I applaud you.
Finally, I will be watching carefully for any of our tactics, such as number 42, to make an appearance in any one of your stories, I am sure it would make things rather interesting indeed, or perhaps in your bountiful spare time during this holiday, as you have no need for revision, you might just make a fic about our time at the Uiversity of Pure Evil? Also, to any of RebelMaru's stalker followers out there, her house is situated near to a big tree.
Inspector Goole over and out.
| Alicia Spinnet 3/30/12 . chapter 9
This is so great! :) I love your story...plz update really really really soon!
| Writing In Ink Forever 3/3/12 . chapter 6
How do you come up with these awesome names for countries? I wanted to do that with one of my stories, but I couldn't ever come up with awesome enough names for my countries. :( Sadface.
I love your style! If I wrote like that, I'd be confused throughout the story. Thank the gods for the space bar thing! But my Editing thing isn't working, so I can't use it...
| AliceGreene 3/1/12 . chapter 1
Okay, I'm in love with this. I love how you go back and forth with the different characters, and how I really got into Ava's thoughts during the clock chimes.
AH! Brilliant. I must read more. (:
| Little Eloise 2/25/12 . chapter 4
PLEASE CONTINUE. I JUST HATE IT WHEN AUTHORS STOP WRITING EVEN IF THE STORY IS BRILLIANT.
So be a good girl and continue to write your brilliant story. ;)
(And be a better girl and make sure Avery and Ryuu end up together :D)