|Reviews for Charley and the Coach|
| Technopeasant 2/22/12 . chapter 5
Alright, time for me to finally give you my thoughts on your work. I like the effort you put into describing the bar, as it gives it a far more developed background than a usual erotic story. Not to mention, I like the prohibition references as I have a soft spot for the 1920s. As for characterization, Charlene is absolutely lovely and you make the reader empathize with her pain and frustration. As for Coach, I have to fight against my natural dislike for organized sports, but I will admit that as my personal bias and leave it at that. As an erotica, it is decently laid back and handles it with enough style to pull it off in a workable way. My only real criticism is that in chapter five the change between Charley and Coach's perspective is a bit jarring. Other than that, it works well.