I think this would make an amazing story. It has a lot of potential as more than just a simple, little one shot. There's a lot happening behind the scenes, clearly.

It's fine the way it is. The only thing I would change is pacing, but I understand it was an assignment. I really enjoyed reading this, it was sweet, if not a little odd at the sudden demands about her boss. I'm glad you posted this, thank you for sharing it.

Wow i loved that ending it was in a way magical :D there was one msitake that i noticed but it wasnt anything major.. i really enjoyed it x