| Reviews for I'm sorry, Joshua |
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Marla's Found 6/8/12 . chapter 1 I thought this line was very cute: "...Josh is requesting a video chat with you". What? From my bathroom? Maybe he's out of toilet paper or something..." Glad she could find humor in a strange situation. Looks like case of a doppleganger with a backpack so Annie did what any girl would do - RUN! I was confused by this line: "...Without any warning the lights went out from the bathroom and I couldn't help but screaming from surprise. The light switch was outside the room so it must have been Josh. I started to cry..." I have never been in a bathroom where the lightswitch was on the outside - is this something new? This line doesn't exactly say when the instument of death was actually opened: "...I sneaked out squeezing the penknife in my shaky hands...Before I could stop myself I had stabbed him with the penknife..." It still sounds like the knife was closed. Maybe you could clarify that a bit more. This is an alarming statement: "...I have to die with Joshua, my best friend. I have to share his pain so we can stay friends forever. We've gotten through all the hard times and problems, why not this one too?..." I don't think murder/suicide is the greatest plan Annie - they have therapists for this kind of thing (or exorcists!) DON'T KILL YOURSELF! All in all, I do like the simple clean way you closed the story with a nice good bye. |
CieloRayn 4/28/12 . chapter 1I liked this story; though short it caught my attention though I wish I knew who the evil josh was. Interesting concept though. |
blueagle246 3/4/12 . chapter 1Great story! I always love a strage tale. |