You are writing a play? It is off to a great start, with plenty of strong dialogue between the characters. What I would suggest is explaining the setting at the very beginning-a little like Shakespeare does in Romeo and Juliet. This would help readers to imagine where your characters are during this scene. :D

Hey, this is an awesome story. I love how you are writing it as a play should be written and also that it is about war. You know, I barely started reading, but I'm starting to dislike Karpos. I hope you update soon 'cause you have me hooked. Great story!