| Reviews for Pretty |
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VampirePenguin88 5/14/12 . chapter 1I really enjoyed this, I love how you left me puzzling over who or what's point of view you had written. Good description, Grammar etc. 10 out of 10 for you . :) - VampirePenguin88 :) |
St. Iggy the Pyro 3/17/12 . chapter 1I read through this twice, so here are my opinions on both of them. 1st Read You mention innocence, and pure white gown, I think little girl with porcelain skin and fair blond hair. You mention the danger in the speaker, I think, my goodness, this will not end well. You mention...spider? Wait...It was a spider the entire time? I thought...I mean...well...I'm a bad person. 2nd Read You mention pretty, I think a beautiful butterfly with glimmering white wings sailing through a demon's paradise, entranced by a shimmering web. You mention harm, and I imagine what spiders do to bugs. I shudder in horror. You mention spiders, and I begin to review. This was amazing. Thanks! |
11's-SevenofHearts 3/13/12 . chapter 1I liked this. It was nicely creepy. You built up the story's finale quite well, and the speaker's identity -a spider- was truly unexpected. Good work. |